2525 North Waterworks St. / Discussion

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psul 07 Mar 2016 09:30

I wasn't so sure about the SCP-2446, but between the GoI format and this, I'm really getting into Lambda-5. Good stuff.

sirpudding 07 Mar 2016 18:43

This was suspenseful and entertaining enough to get me to upvote despite the use of reality bending as an X-mutant-gene-like generic power source.

Kalinin 11 Mar 2016 18:28

I'm neutral voting this installment as well. I don't find any fault with the writing. The overall narrative doesn't feel like it's being deepened or advanced here, however. Maybe that's an inherent issue with an after-action document, I'm not certain, but I don't really feel like my understanding of Lambda-5 changes at all after reading this.

Decibelles 11 Mar 2016 21:57

"I thought it wasn’t affected by any psionics," replied Marcus. The

Incomplete sentence. If there's not supposed to be a sentence there, I'd delete "The". If there is, I'll give permission to allow that sentence to be edited to finish, unless there's more than one sentence supposed to go there… in which case, I'd just remove "The" and wait until after the contest to add it back in.

GreenRaven 26 Sep 2021 06:27

He shifted, trying to prevent the metal lining from digging into his skin

Proper armor has some kind of padding or layering between hard stuff and skin. If that's the telekill, being sandwiched or covered hasn't been shown to mitigate, block, or change its effects, so the armor should still be covered. If the padding is damaged to the point the lining is exposed, it should be repaired or replaced.

The rest of this… very, very meh. I can see where there's supposed to be emotion, where the reader is supposed to get invested in the fate of St. George, where horror is supposed to be… but I'm not feeling it. It's not evoking what it's presenting.