Children of Spiders, Vanguard of God
Part six of Christ In Scarlet. Thanks to OriTiefling and
FLOORBOARDS for the crit.
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Auuuugh. There’s just so much evil. You portray the evil so well.
Not in a nihilistic or misanthropic way, but just in a plain statement— there is evil, and it’s fucked up. This whole series carries the spite and vileness of the 2000s-2010s, and of course these things carry on into the modern day, but in the context of the series comes to a head here.
Honestly my favorite tale from you and definitely your best work so far.
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this fucking sucks.
its great, but man it fucking sucks and i hate it.
take your +1 and leave me to sulk.
This isn't the most useful feedback (since it and my vote are largely based on personal enjoyment), but in the interest of having more discussion on tales, I'm going to give it anyway.
While a realistic portrayal of something grotesque writhing and growing inside a person, the charisma void of the protagonist makes it hard to say I enjoyed this one. That certainly seems intentional, especially when reinforced with the second-person perspective and sparse external details, but it also doesn't leave me a lot to grasp onto. I'm more than happy to read about villains. Even unlikable ones! There is usually something that keeps me invested in their stories though, whereas this is driven by a (depressingly realistic) extremist gravity that makes it hard to keep reading for the usual comeuppance-based catharsis.
That's probably too many words to say that this is well written, but I don't feel satisfied for having completed it.
This is so good and hit way too close to home, even for someone like me who never got fully sucked into the alt-right pipeline. This is quite possibly one of the most evil things I've seen written on this site, it isn't cartoonish, or exaggerated, or watered down, this is it.
Congrats on making me +1 a scarlet king tale.
Something something gonna write scps maybe.
I liked this and I gave it a +1. It works for what it is. You do a good job balancing audience sympathies regarding this protagonist. There's enough sympathy for the story to feel like it's from his point of view, but no suggestion that his circumstances mitigate his actions.
I personally would have liked it more if it had been more overtly supernatural. As things stand, the only indications of the Scarlet King's influence are metatextual elements, namely the red text and the grammar going screwy. Because neither of these things exist in-universe, this story is effectively about wholly unsupernatural events, which I personally find disappointing. When the guy found the second internet on his dad's computer, I was expecting it to be the anomalous web, but there's nothing like that, and, indeed, it's quite unclear why he couldn't find this nazi podcast until he used his dad's computer. Maybe I'm missing something, but, while I certainly got something from the story, I'm not sure I got any more than I would've if I had no idea what the Scarlet King or the SCP-wiki were.
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