SCP-7923 / Discussion

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hmmm

Randomini 23 Jun 2023 21:34

if I didn't know any better id say these guys were just killing random people and getting away with it!!! heh, that's the,, subetext……. KID>………

ch00bakka 24 Jun 2023 01:25

i think all scps should b written like this, clinical tone was created by bad writers to hide their mistakes, just write good smh smh +1

A Random Day 24 Jun 2023 01:31

Love the voice of the narrator. The article has a frantic yet assured tone that feels surreal in a way which, ironically, almost none of the other Surrealistics articles do. One of the best stories of its kind.

PoufyPoufson 24 Jun 2023 02:18

Maybe I'm missing something, but I don't feel like this was the best presentation for this admittedly cool as fuck concept

+1

Raddagher 24 Jun 2023 05:31

This has so much personality to it, I liked this style a lot more than I initially thought I was going to

+1

TheFlatulence 24 Jun 2023 07:05

Not funny enough to be a joke SCP, but funny enough for me. +1

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~TheFlatulence

Katttt 27 Jun 2023 03:45

I can exactly imagine his voice as i read it +1

The Scowler 27 Jun 2023 12:28

I'm so conflicted by this one.

It works, but doesn't work...

I get what the format is going for - the informal tone and first person voice work super well in this context, and suit the vibes of the article perfectly. (No pun intended.) It helps convey the sense that the reader is part of an in-group, this isn't a standard situation, and the message's urgency is more important than formality.

The issue is that ignoring the usual formatting without any justification undermines the credibility of the in-universe author, and makes them feel more like a D-class who /thinks/ they're in Surrealistics than an actual researcher. All I'd need is some justification for this in the article (they're writing this on the run, it's a first draft, if they ignore the standard format RAISA won't see it, etc) and this would be fine, but without it the informality isn't working for me.

-1 for now, but easily a +1 with minor changes.

Agree

jaboi 27 Jun 2023 20:06

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There should be an in-universe explanation as to why it’s so informal, I assume surrealistics people are still scientists and doctors (who are fairly accomplished to have gained credentials in an anomalous field). Even if they were operating covertly they would maintain professionalism.