It's a great story but there are…. so many adverbs. I count 36 adverbs in this sub-thousand-word shortform piece, which feels a tad clunky (my 5.5K word entry uses just over 60 or so, 3x less density of adverbs). I try to read my works aloud to catch overuse of adverbs and, granted, not every use case says you must avoid using this many, but it's considered good practice. In particular, "seemingly/apparently", which on average are the biggest offenders for diluting the impact of words by introducing a level of uncertainty.
Similar overuse of "uncertain" words like seems, seeming, seemed, appears, apparent are present throughout- 95% of these are probably unnecessary.
SCP-6467 is a large humanoid entity of seemingly biomechanical construction. Most of its features seem to resemble those […]
Resemble is to appear as is to seem like. You get me?
All-in-all, it's a well presented idea. I recommend tightening up the prose after the contest, however.
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Smells like success.
No longer relevant.
It was a reference to an old internet meme, sorry about that. In retrospect it’s a bit tasteless, yeah, my bad.
Smells like success.
Huh. Alright, I dig this one. The logs are neat and the ending is just a really interesting note to end on.
+1
I'm… actually a bit torn on the ending here! It feels a bit forced, and not like the natural conclusion to the story that's been presented so far. I don't innately dislike it or what happens, but it doesn't feel like a natural segue from what was happening prior. +1 either way because I enjoy this article a lot!
