SCP-7353 / Discussion

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Lordgeorge16 16 Feb 2023 21:30

It's a mildly amusing concept, but I can see a plethora of small punctuation, spacing, capitalization, and other grammatical errors that this axe would probably be smashing itself into as we speak. Your image also didn't embed correctly.

I recommend that you run this page through a site like Grammarly or take it back to the sandbox and make a thread in the Drafts Critique forum so you can get a few other users to help you clean it up and make something truly spectacular. In its current state, however, I'll have to downvote it.

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Rice Windu 16 Feb 2023 21:33

the axe is meant to suck at grammar, that's the whole point. I've ran the rest of it through grammarly multiple times but I shall double check that I haven't missed any in the rest of the article.
edit: there were several non-intentional errors I had initially missed after rewrites, thank you for bringing these to my attention. The image is embedded as intended on both pc and mobile view as far as i can tell.

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Re: -1

Lordgeorge16 16 Feb 2023 21:43

Apologies, I was referring to errors that I'd seen outside of the axe's dialogue. I'll post a small number of examples below:

Unnecessary space before the comma (also I'd probably say "grammatical errors" rather than grammar errors, it feels more natural as an adjective + noun):

Below is a list of known grammar errors according to SCP-7353 , testing was performed[…]

Unnecessary space before the period:

[…]on a piece of paper across the room from SCP-7353 .

The words "spelling", "sentence", and "language" don't need to be capitalized, but "Oxford" does:

Incorrect Spelling.
A Sentence missing or misusing punctuation.
Unnecessary repetition of a phrase/word.
Sentence missing an oxford comma4.
Garbage or unintelligible phrases.
Words using the Latin alphabet in Languages other than English.

And there are a multitude of other similar errors throughout the page. It's possible that Grammarly might not detect them, and that's why I urge you to ask for help in the Drafts Critique forum to get help in catching the rest of those mistakes.

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ExiAsWell 16 Feb 2023 21:44

Yeah, grammarly is pretty bad at the SCP format, especially if you don’t have a premium membership. Honestly, I would ask draft critiques to help with line by line crit.

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Rice Windu 16 Feb 2023 22:33

thank you for these, I'll keep an eye out for any other minor errors, spacing errors mostly occurred when changing to the number, though the overly capitalised words was missed, this has already gone through crit on both the IRC and the SCP official discord, both of which I use instead of the on site Draft forums because it is easier for me to check

7353 / The Axe of Grammarcles

Rice Windu 16 Feb 2023 21:32

My Second SCP, the image was one I took and release under the CC BY-SA 3.0 license, however I have not done this before so if there's steps I missed with that please let me know. Hope you enjoy!

Getting better...

Suzette Day 17 Feb 2023 02:18

This has been cleaned up quite a bit. Couple of capitalisations after commas instead of periods but overall it's much better. I'm willing to upvote this and see where and how it goes.

Gaster66 07 Mar 2023 00:58

I that the last thing you remember

Should be Is

a black orb of inch radius

I think there's a word or two missing there

Dr. Branch: SCP-7353you

Missing space

keiya 07 Mar 2023 13:02

Huh… Dr. Sinclair seemed to be aware of the place of which the axe spoke, since she asked relevant questions… but she also used the same name for it ("the forest") several times. So does SCP-7353, but I guess it's been messed with enough that it can get away with it. Still, might want to have Sinclair use more varied language.

This does still have some stray grammar errors, but I enjoyed the read.

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