Elpis is completely benevolent and loyal to the Foundation.
As I said, the tone is not exactly clinical, and while I do understand the intention behind this, it should still use the official classification.
Note: To the person who thought showing Nagito Komaeda to Elpis was a good idea, I will find out who you are, and when I do, it will not only be myself that you have to be weary of.-Director Woodson
While I have no doubt any Danganronpa fan will have a chuckle out of it, it also severly impacts the tone of the article, and is much to reminiscent of lolfoundation.
materialized for an extended period of time(over 24 hours).
You should expand on these materializations, which does not happen later on in the article.
heroes from the future.
This sentence is very informal.
human1
My biggest problem with the footnote is that "biology does not matter" is, informal, it should read more as something along the lines of: "This includes any being which, biologically was or is not human."
induces a feeling of hopeful, optimism and a reduction in stress level
There is a grammar mistake in this sentence, as it should either be "hopefulness, optimism," or "hopeful optimisn,".
Addendum XXXX-1
Addenda should go after the description, as such, we should first get Elpis's description and the two discovery logs be merged.
SCP-XXXX-B claims that this is not an ability it always had, but rather, one that was brought on by external factors
That is something which should be expanded on, however, as far as I could tell, that does not happen in the article.
However, the nature of this effect cannot be further inspected, as it also possesses an extremely potent cognito hazard that causes rapid decomposition of the body and consciousness, taking approximately 17-20 seconds to completely break down a healthy adult body.
This does not jive well with the rest of the article, especially considering employees are allowed to interact with it and are encouraged to do so, and yet, Elpis's body according to this can breakdown the body of anyone in a few seconds.
Several experiments were carried out with D-class personnel and different ways of directly and indirectly.
What kind of experiments? You should probably expand on this point.
The Greek daemon?
As far as I know, Elpis is a spirit, and not a demon.
The flood was supposed to bury it in the earth forever,
I find it weird this is not elaborated on.
Because I willed it so.
That, er, is a confusing explanation.
SECONDARY CLASS:
BINAH
I don't see the need for a secondary esoteric class here. Usually, you'd want to provide a reason for them being used.
SCP-XXXX-B's "calming effect" which in actuality, only makes victims docile, is also part of this security feature.
You really should elaborate on all of this.
Interviewed: SCP-XXXX-B
Basically everything in this should be expanded on through more logs. We currently do not see Elpis struggle with this, as such, it would be hard to connect and empathize with her.
HomerMaybe, 24 Jan 2023 16:53
