SPaG:
In A2-2001:
reality benders and iminent XK-Class scenarios
I finally found a legit spelling error! "imminent"
I’ve even got x-ray analysis of blacked-out sentences.
The plural form of 'analysis' is 'analyses'.
Tone:
In A2-1985:
And please Cooper, we aren’t friends. Don't call me by my first name.
The tone of the e-mail gets a little casual here at the end. I would suggest a colder response to Cooper using her first name. Try, "Also, we aren't friends, Cooper. Do not call me by my first name."
In B1-1993:
SCP-XXXX-3 is the provisional designation for the former Foundation researcher Alexandra Hovsky. She is sealed in […] granting her inadvertent command […]. Her vitals are routinely monitored along with her […].
Through this particular document, there's a very slight tonal disconnect by referring to an SCP-XXXX designated object by gender after classifying Hovsky as an SCP. I would suggest using either the 'it/its' pronoun or simply referring to her as SCP-XXXX-3, aligning with the normative tone of the wiki.
This doesn't extend to other sub-documentation, though — such as in the Discovery section.
[6:32] Second-in-command is unable to produce an answer, citing total unawareness of its special containment procedure.
- I would suggest capitalizing "Special Containment Procedures" here or shortening the phrase to "Containment Procedures".
[7:03] The site Director arrives
…
[7:12] The director flees
Similar inconsistent titling is present throughout the Incident Report. All such titles would be capitalized:
- Director
- Communications Specialist [or you should shorten to CommSpec]
Formatting / Code:
In B1-1993:
The timestamps listed are oddly formatted. If you're denoting time in a 24-hour format, it would always be HH:MM [eg; [06:32] for 6:32AM or [18:32] for 6:32PM].
Part IV Notes and Observations:
[6:37] The communications specialist, who had no prior experience or tolerance with the drugs, does not properly self-dose and begins to suffer critical mnestic overexposure.
Good gods, the thought of overdosing on mnestics is a terrifying concept, holy shit!
[7:05] The unnamed researcher is expunged.
I may be a little confused on what you mean by 'expunged' here. If you mean that they are erased from certain parts of the Report, awesome! If you mean something else here, then perhaps you could explain or use different verbiage.
Meanwhile, an overhead orbital cannon aligned itself for emergency pulverization
Oh, shit! They invoked HIMEOBS!
Kidding, but this is both entertaining and, again, kinda terrifying. Instead of setting thermonuclear devices in the structure to initiate a self-destruct, they brought in the Rods From God!
Personally, I was fully unfazed the day that SCP-XXXX popped into my inbox. Another email to answer. Between the pattern screamers and blood rituals, it was another file in the archives. Truth be told, the only impression it left on me was that of a deep, earnest annoyance. That’s what happens when the Ethics Committee gets involved. The emails become meetings, and suddenly you have to pretend you care.
In this paragraph, you've completely nailed what it's like to work in any bureaucratic workplace.
On the cross-referencing in A2-2001 — This is an interesting metacritique on pre-existing scips with somewhat similar properties. Something I've not really seen on the Wiki! Usually when someone cross-references, especially in a first-time article draft, it ends up turning all LOLFoundation. [Hai, guise! I wanna make a knife that cuts through SCP-148, can take down SCP-682 in one hit, and the user doesn't afraid of anything! 05-69 authorized open kill-testing on D-Class! Oh, and there are barrels of SCP-447 everywhere! Just remember that Dr. Gears told us not to let any dead bodies get near SCP-447-1! LOL!!!1!1] An extreme example, but I think you catch my drift. Ya did good here!
