Sorry if I come off as harsh here but I wish people genuinely did more about Unreality and Alex Thorley. Its content tends to go past 'less is more' and go straight into 'just less' and I feel that's something that affects this piece. You start with a really interesting concept, with Thorley moving into the beach, but then the same twist comes about, where they don't know how they know/do something, then we're back, and then it just sorta ends in the same way most Unreality articles end?
This is definitely a bigger issue on the concept of Thorley/Unreality pieces, but it does end up reflecting in your piece: It lacks content. It doesn't feel like the missing content enhances the piece; it just makes it emptier. Thorley also does not feel like a character, but rather a placeholder for someone who doesn't exist: Not because a role is empty does it means the character occupying said role should also be emtpy.
Of course, there is some inkling of a personality here, but I don't think it's pushed hard nor long enough to really make a noticeable difference.
Overall, I might sound harsh but hey, blame the other like 3 people who wrote Thorley for this con. For real though, I think this could be an interesting piece, but it needs more content, or different content? It shouldn't feel like a rehash of already existing content, at the very least, which is how it feels to me.
But yeah, as you might guess, not a big fan. -1, although a very weak one; this piece does have the potential to be very good.
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