[SEEKING FEEDBACK] Interdimensional Species

Summary:

A tiamet-class anomaly that designates an entire species

[SEEKING FEEDBACK] Invasive Interdimensional Species

JacobGilford 30 Nov 2022 18:52

A tiamet-class anomaly that designates an entire species of anomalous aliens, and how the foundation destroys them.

I moved and trimmed your thread summary, since it was taking up extra space in the main forum screen. Try to keep thread descriptions (the text in the little box under the thread title) and titles short so you don't crowd out other authors in the forum listing. ~Zyn

https://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/testy-test

I'm looking for feedback and suggestions on how to improve, this took way too long to make and I wanna make sure it's perfect before I post it, so it doesn't almost immediately get destroyed by dislikes. I hope you like it! If you notice any grammar issues or typos, let me know so I can fix it.

Last edited on 01 Dec 2022 15:29 by JacobGilford Show more

Re: [SEEKING FEEDBACK] Invasive Interdimensional Species

Everturning 01 Dec 2022 20:00

I *really* like your attention to formatting, but I noticed a few issues with it within a few minutes of reading. For one, I feel like the phrase “Despite me being level 5” is a bit redundant considering that they’re emailing another member of O5 who would know this already. I’m not sure how to fix it, but maybe just remove the 5. Next, I feel as though the mentioning of Dr Bright is a bit out of place, and seems to just be there to say something similar to “Look at that lovable rule-breaking scamp that that list was made for!” if that makes sense. You may be able to replace this with something like “Some sort of low level researcher that thinks humor is better than proper documentation.” As for O5-11’s mentioning of Bright, I would say that they would say something along the lines of “I’ll search for the “researcher” you mention and make sure they know the way we work.” I’m yet to finish, so I’ll edit again if I find some more things that could use some help. Edit: I now see that Dr Bright comes up again. I feel that this works, but the previous mention could still be removed.

Last edited on 01 Dec 2022 20:12 by Everturning Show more

JacobGilford 01 Dec 2022 21:32

Thanks for your feedback! I just edited it to fix this discrepancy.

JacobGilford 01 Dec 2022 15:32

By the way, this article is subject to tweaks and updates, as I really want this article to be somewhat liked. I hope it will be a great addition to the community.

Last edited on 01 Dec 2022 15:40 by JacobGilford Show more