SCP-7432 / Discussion

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Jack Ike 13 Oct 2022 09:31

Thanks to minmin, Shaggydredlocks, and swordlover87 for crit!

And a major thanks to Locke for inviting me to Anthology. It's a major honour to be a part of one of their projects!

I've been working on this since January, which may not seem too long but it's certainly felt like an aeon, and I'm glad to finally have it off my mind.

Inspired by SCP-6416, so now it's Placeholder's turn. hehehe

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UncannyClown276 14 Oct 2022 00:10

in my mind, this is the truest masterpiece anthology has produced so far. i doubt it will be surpassed.

i'm not sure what else to say. this is absolutely stunning.

(account deleted) 14 Oct 2022 07:23

This hurt my mind to read in the best way possible. Amazing.

Well-written but don't like it

ILoveTheMoon 15 Oct 2022 22:03

Truly I can't fully explain the difference, but it didn't strike me as horror so much as it was just terrible things happening to nice people. I read M for Moonlight and that was great horror.

It's interesting for presenting a foe to the Chronology Department, I'm not aware of many they have, and even that one from the bas-relief seems like something that's an enemy to everybody, not just the Chron dept.

Is it just a coincidence that the last page is The End and it switches to first person?

I have also learned that apparently I hate 'it was a trick the whole time' reveals, unless the audience is sort of in on it.

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RadioactiveRADS 17 Oct 2022 02:50

The ending was nice, but a lot of stuff before that wasn't to my taste.

The article tricks me into thinking it is going to be an SCP article, when, in fact, it is a short tale series condensed into one article. This wouldn't be as jarring if the main anomaly was shorter, and if the three entities were more connected to the keystone itself. Because while I was reading at the beginning, I was forcing myself to continue on as most of it read as fluff to get the other point; moments of them literally going in circles and talking about how weird this is, aren't really entertaining. The action/moving segments, where the characters were actually talking and gaining info and doing things other than turning in circles, were the most interesting and engaging parts. The ideas presented in them alone kept me going despite my grievances.

I wish this article was shorter and more streamlined. Again, the ideas here are awesome but they are bogged down by masquerading as an SCP article when its more tale than anything else, lots of filler of the characters going in literal circles, and not getting to the point quick enough for me to be satisfied with its length.

Maxyfran73 20 Oct 2022 12:32

Damn, that was really good. This whole adventure was amazing, with the entire last bit a really great way of concentrating all that happened before and selling the reader into this 'trap' the triskalion had planted for the agent.

I do have to say that Rads does have a point: The connection with the object itself feels flimsy (Although I don't mind it that much), but the prose adds a lot of padding that didn't really feel necessary by the time I finished my read. The first exploration fragment and about a third of the second have some bogs in them that really slow down the read, and they don't feel narratively satisfying: They could have been reduced and I think it would help to reduce them.

Regardless, it was still an amazing read and I enjoyed the ending fragment too much not to upvote the piece, despite its issues. +1

Mazed 19 Dec 2022 08:22

That was a whole lot (like, a whole lot) of buildup to some jerk(s) putting on a hackneyed smug villain act and then The End, No Moral. If there's a connection to another article that actually adds some layers to the final part, it should be more evident, because as a stand-alone, it's a dud.

And it's a shame, because everything leading up to that was legitimately good, with evocative and surreal prose that keeps you pretty glued. I particularly loved how the triskelion imagery was evoked without having to be blatantly spelled out; the reader who'd been paying attention knows what it is the characters are navigating well before they do, and it adds a lot to the narrative.

Null_Phoenix 28 Jun 2023 01:13

I really liked this article. Build up was great, story was good, and loved how you incorporated the triskalion. My only complaint would be the shift from third-person to first-person. It was kinda random and didn't add a whole lot to the ending. Overall really good and is deserving of its own canon/series.

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