SCP-5417 / Discussion

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swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 20:25

One friend left to sell clothes
One works down by the coast
One had two kids, but lives alone
One's brother overdosed
One's already on his second wife
One's just barely getting by, but
These people raised me —

And I can't wait to go home.

- Ed Sheeran, 'Castle on the Hill'

Yeah, I don't know where this came from either.

Thanks to wagyusteak, DrApricus, FLOORBOARDS, Celare, Fishish, OriTiefling, Uncle Nicolini, and Fish^12 for their feedback!

Image - CC

If you want to see more of my work, feel free to check out my Author Page!

Last edited on 14 Nov 2022 21:33 by swordlover87 Show more

Translations!

swordlover87 23 Aug 2022 15:04

As the title implies, this article has gotten a few translations! Cool as hell! Here they are:

Chinese by Enterark_D

Traditional Chinese by Nyunyunyun

Korean by Nareum

Japanese by walksoldi

I’ll update this post if any more are made.

Last edited on 27 Oct 2022 16:15 by swordlover87 Show more

MrIverson 19 Aug 2022 20:31

Bonum articulum

+1

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 20:32

not as bonum as YOU

LAN 2D 19 Aug 2022 20:42

This is great. Extremely interesting and unique anomaly, combined with a satisfying ending that leaves you wanting more. +1, for sure

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 20:53

Glad you enjoyed the article! Who knows, maybe this'll spawn a canon somewhere down the line; there's definitely room for it.

LAN 2D 19 Aug 2022 21:10

Even though that'd be cool as hell, imo one of the reasons this article works so well is because we don't have all the information. I feel like a canon expanding on this idea would have to be really aware of that fact, otherwise it wouldn't work.

Celare 19 Aug 2022 20:50

They say hell is other people. They say a lot of horseshit.

Hell is being tight-packed between walls. Hell is heat and sweat and stinking moisture. Hell is the clamor of voices and piles of trash and the knowledge that no space can be yours. Hell is the feeling of a body against your back and your belly.

That's not all it is.

Hell is rooms all empty. Hell is the way sound echoes off of bare walls. It's cities without citizens, streets without feet, beds without lovers. It's windows that look out hollow. Hell is remaining in all of that. Alone.

We build houses around hell; it's all we can do.

+1

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 20:53

Man this comment is like, as good as the entire article I just wrote.

Mr Carbon 19 Aug 2022 21:34

Dear new authors who don’t understand what kind of compelling imagery you need to have the entry based on the concept alone:

As the space within SCP-5417 was not sufficient to accommodate 8.6 billion individuals at once, this event resulted in the majority of humanity being killed instantly. The primary cause of death was massive crush damage from high pressure. The resultant pulverized mass of human remains evacuated through all available openings; viscera was dispersed over a radius of thirty kilometers, with some entering low Earth orbit.

Wonderful stuff.

swordlover87 20 Aug 2022 00:40

Ha, I'm glad the imagery was as good for you as it was for me. This was a really fun description to write.

DrApricus 19 Aug 2022 22:03

It was stellar being able to crit the draft, and I’m glad to see it up on the site. If you wouldn’t mind, I’d love to write a tale or SCP in this world you’ve spawned.

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 22:21

I would absolutely not mind that! In fact, I’d love it! Go right ahead.

winkwonkboi 19 Aug 2022 22:06

Very crushing. +1

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 22:22

haha i bet that’s what those 8 billion people were thinking

(Glad you liked it!)

Fish^12 19 Aug 2022 22:27

Still would've liked to see that satellite image of blood house.

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bloop

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 22:29

Me too, man. If I can figure out a way to make a satellite image of miles of blood that doesn’t look horribly cheesy and fake, I’ll let you know.

+1

Guezma 19 Aug 2022 22:52

Looks like figuring out what happened here is a pressing issue.

Re: +1

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 23:23

wheeeeze

OriTiefling 19 Aug 2022 23:23

Honestly the strongest point of this article was the imagery in the anomaly's description itself. Personally I don't think this needs the log at the end at all, but I see why it's here. Excellent work.

swordlover87 19 Aug 2022 23:24

Totally understandable, my favorite part of the article is the description too. Thanks for your kind words! :D

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