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This is top tier excellence. It starts out as a very effective mystery/horror thing and effectively transitions to a very wholesome ending. I only have one concern and that's the line "May you release them". The phrasing here is awkward, and I would suggest rephrasing to either "Will you release them?" Or "Are you willing to release them?" Or something along those lines to help it flow more naturally.
Phenomenal work. +1
Really enjoyed this one, especially the researchers. The dialogue felt very good, and certain actions like the senior researcher almost kicking open the van door, but first stopping and opening it a little really brought them to life. I hope to see them used more in more SCP's by the author.
Amazing writing. And not just about the entity itself- I loved that the personalities and goals of the researchers contributed to its containment, and them being written so well elevated the article to heights that it wouldn't have if Wally just decided over time to work with the foundation. Wonderful!!
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