SCP-7019 / Discussion

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Attila the Pun 30 Jul 2022 22:44

Finally managed to make one of these in time! Feels good.

Anyways, we're coming up on that deadline fast, so this is going to have to be a coldpost.

I'll probably replace this image once I find a better one (Vulpes is supposed to be 30 and the guy in the photo is 41), but in the meantime it's cropped from this:
https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/a/aa/ISS-65_Pesquet_and_Kimbrough_work_on_spacesuits.jpg

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Slot preferences:

• 7001
• 7019
• 7333
• 7027
• 7039

If none of these are free, I would prefer the lowest available prime number.

Percevale 02 Aug 2022 02:34

Love the dialogue in this! I read a book in high school with a similar type of clarivoyance system and it’s become one of my favorites overall, so I’m glad it was used here.

My one question would be why the containment protocols haven’t been updated since the addendum, since now the Foundation should know that he knows he’s anomalous.

Attila the Pun 02 Aug 2022 17:23

I'll admit I could have made this clearer, but there's a few reasons they wouldn't immediately accept his description of his properties:

1. He might be lying about it.
2. Even if he's honest, he may not understand his foresight as much as he thinks he does.

So even if the reader is expected to accept his testimony wholesale, the Foundation is justifiably going to want to run some tests first.

This article is going to need some tweaking before the voting period closes, so I might clarify some of this in the text later.

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Orlando_Wordsmith 08 Aug 2022 11:59

This is pretty solid! I like the character and he describes his anomalous effect without a full-on explanation, because even he doesn't fully understand it. And, typically for the Foundation, they too can't be sure if he's right, so they're keeping him on for the time being. Good luck (heh) to you on your entry.

Mr Carbon 11 Aug 2022 04:06

I'm always in favor of fleshing out MTFs, and I did enjoy this. It's maybe a little straightforward; the twist at the end didn't feel like much of a twist, given the context of the rest of the article. I did like how Vulpes (groaning at the fox-themed name, by the way…) is kept in the dark about being an SCP object and continuously surveilled by the Foundation; that's a good way of solving the dilemma of what to do with him. I did feel that the conversation log dragged on a bit, and could have probably been half the length for the same plot impact. My only other reservation is that it's maybe not "7000-worthy," but that's not a reason not to upvote, and it's a decent piece of work overall.

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i like foxes

totallynotenby 11 Aug 2022 06:32

The dialouge in this is on point. The ending is abrupt and I honestly really wish there was more. I like the story here I like the characters and I wish there was much more to read about them. I would read an entire tale series just about the mc. The clarvoyence power is really cool. Also if there is a fox in your article I will upvote it so like you got me there. Great job!
_-temmy

#78

DrScaramouche 12 Aug 2022 02:56

Isn't Mole Rats the one that in some tales never loses a member? Intriguing…

"We're in that timeline " .. missed what this is referring to. Am I dumb?

Also, did yer boi kill of Lawrimore? That's just cold.

You said this was coldposted. I'd love to see this article with more time given. No-vote for now.

Re: #78

Attila the Pun 12 Aug 2022 15:57

Isn't Mole Rats the one that in some tales never loses a member?

On the contrary. Mole Rats is best known for getting annihilated in almost every single article they appear in.

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Re: #78

DrScaramouche 13 Aug 2022 03:42

Ah. You're right. Had a senior moment.

Dr Balthazaar 19 Aug 2022 15:09

I pretty much agree with temmys thoughts on this. It's very underrated, and a fun read.

J S Writer 23 Aug 2022 17:21

• To maintain the clinical tone of the article that is consistent in the beginning sections, the Addendum after the Background section should have a number designation and shouldn’t just be an email. There should also be a sentence or two prefacing how the email is relevant to the article.

• Similar to the bullet point above, the Observation Log should have had a sentence or two explaining how it’s relevant to Commander Vulpes and should have also included how this log was obtained (Did Forsythe turn it in? Maybe Lawrimore before he was killed in the Site-228 containment breach?).

• Overall, the article started off really interesting but then didn’t expand upon any of the implications of Vulpes having these "alleged" anomalous traits. The ending of the article seems too abrupt and makes the article feel like it has a lot of wasted potential in terms of storytelling.

• Rating: -1

Maxyfran73 26 Aug 2022 06:27

While I agree with J S Writer that this feels like it could have been expanded in a better way, I like what's in here. It was a short, interesting read, and the ending was, while expected, still pretty good.

+1

-1

RadioactiveRADS 27 Aug 2022 19:11

I like the ideas presented here, but in the end, I was craving for more. As it is now, it's too barebones for me to really sink my teeth into. You gave us the set-up but nothing else to expand upon it.

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