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This is my first time trying to write one of these, long time fan of the Foundation. Hopefully, people enjoy it.
Very thankful to the Butterflies that helped me hone the concept.
Looking forward to seeing who wins.
Top 5 Slots:
1. 7042
2. 7742
3. 7242
4. 7142
5. 7342
Super cute. I enjoyed it. The amendum is kinda weak, though, and the text just before it could actually already serve as a nice, if sad, end.
I had thought of that But I had ideas for possible progression if I shoot to make another at some point.
I’m glad that over all people liked it.
I absolutely loved this article. The dialouge is very well done and so is the story. I love the connections this makes to wilsons wildlife and I really liked the PoI. The article effectively makes me feel for a book and pencil which is really funny. You captured the objects personallity through dialouge which is a very difficult thing to do. I think this piece as a whole is well done. There are also a lot of very quoteable lines. The interactions with animals in this article are also on point.
This is a worthy successor to all of 6kon. It carries the same themes and spirit as a lot of the articles from the last xkon. The connections to 6002 and 6500 are really cool. 6kon holds a special place in my heart and this article brought me back. Very well done esspecially for a first time writer <3 +1
-temmy
This is a hell of a first article. I'm not sure why this isn't rated higher.
There are some minor things, for example, some of the dialog crosses into being overdone, but mostly your dialogue is a real strength. It sounds natural, and the characters (book included) have distinct voices.
I think it could be shortened up just a touch, and I agree the last bit might work just as well as the beginning of a tale. A more open end gives the item more chance to be explored by other writers!
All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, and I look forward to future work!
You could have made the SCP stand on its own by making it a sketchbook that conjures animals, but it is by giving it a child-like sentience that really makes this for me. The dialogue, as mentioned by others, is believable. It is also funny too in the classic subversion that avoid cliché by being playful with the concept rather than cynical. Testing log is done well, but I wasn't a fan of the poetry in Gaia's Fortune Manifesto. The final line of Past, Present, Future: Renew is a great slogan but the rest of the poem basically reaffirms the themes of the interview logs rather than adding anything to them in a meaningful way and feels redundant.
And lastly, I agree with other commenters that ending with the isolation of SCP-7000 in the interview is the stronger choice. All in all, lovely SCP! +1
this is criminally underrated and I love it. Well done!
This is a really fun article. The plot and writing are amazing; I loved how you used each test and animal example here to enhance the overall concept of the anomaly. The dialogue was really good, and the way the book speaks, alongside its cognitohazardous abilities, and that last bit following 6500 were really, really good.
Just a pretty solid article overall. Easy +1~
This is a nice one. The dialogue is smooth and to the point, revealing character without being expository, and the tests explore the doctor and the anomaly well. Everything was great until we get to the third addendum with the random 6500 and sarkic connection. That threw me back, a lot. None of the sarkic was foreshadowed except with the PoI acting addicting to it. To make this book be some type of mind parasite consumer in the final act left me confused.
But the other parts were more enjoyable than that one and outweighed the bad.
I love everything everything here except Addendum 5; up until that point, the anomaly is very interesting, the dialogue is very realistic and organic, and the writing in general was very well done. The connections to WWS is fun, as is the article is a whole. The only problem is the ending, which, in my opinion, unnecessarily ties this anomaly to SCP-6500 and Sarkic stuff, which felt like a blindside and led to a really blundered ending. I feel like honing in on the child-personality of 7000 and giving us a final moment where it tries to fix its mistake (where it hurt someone) would have been a much more conclusive ending.
Fortunately, this is only a small blunder amongst an otherwise damn good article, so good job.
Considering the general consensus after the competition ends I might have to do some editing after it gets reposted.
I thought…I had spread in some hints towards the Sarkic origin but apparently not well enough. I think…I know what I could do to pull away from 6500, might actually be able to use Waller to get that *final* “fix”. Or reveal of what she can pull off in the right hands.
I think I got a bit too narrow minded, might make a tale out of some stuff, might not but I left it only open ended for me to pick up not other writers I’ve come to realize.
- “After starting at the D-Class for approximately one minute. The instance” -> “After staring at the D-Class for approximately one minute, the instance”.
- “there's a mind that little book” -> “there’s a mind in that little book”.
I had others but cut them for time/needing to get it greenlit and was told what was stated in the story seemed like enough by one of the main editor's opinions.
Depending on how I might edit this after the competition, I may add more after editing/removing the last section.
