SCP-2665 / Discussion

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Author Post

Thekillerax 26 Nov 2015 02:04

Posting for Amuness Creeps:

This is a collaboration SCP between thekillerax and Amuness Creeps.

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Start day: October 4, 2015

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Image Credit: Image was created by Amuness Creeps.

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Project Time: 52 days

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Credits for critique: Bunton, TwistedGears, MrWrong, psul, Dr Hysteria, Abettik, caseymilo, Aleph, kola, hihahaba, DreamwalkerFae, and a few other people (mention if I forgot you.)

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Special Thanks: For thekillerax being a great collaboration partner in this project, and for DreamwalkerFae for contributing the idea.

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And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.

Last edited on 14 Apr 2016 13:33 by Thekillerax Show more

Re: Author Post

HotCocoaNerd 26 Nov 2015 02:53

I critiqued too. ;_;

Re: Author Post

Thekillerax 26 Nov 2015 03:39

Crap, I forgot to mention that.

Special thanks go to DreamwalkerFae for contributing the idea, and critiquing!

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And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.

Re: Author Post

Hihahaba 14 Apr 2016 13:20

I just realized there was a typo on my nick after all of this time…
I must totes be delusional

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Re: Author Post

Thekillerax 14 Apr 2016 13:33

You didn't see anything…

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And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.

(account deleted) 26 Nov 2015 02:39

+ Hooray for new and cool SCP!

Pros:

• Tone, formatting, and grammar are all good (this might seem a little nit-picky but shouldn't "containment protocols" be "special containment procedures" instead? Unless of course you intended it to be that way).
• Idea is pretty cool (a small group of people that serve as a miniature Foundation but inexplicably go missing and/or die and the memories of one of the members is sealed inside a pickaxe¹)

Cons:

• The only complaints I have are listed below

IMO (things that I personally think could be changed, but will leave the author to decide):

• While the ENCC is all-in-all a pretty informal Foundation, I felt like the inclusion of the recovered documents was pretty… meh. Didn't really add anything to the article as a whole (that's just me though).
• I think the object class should be revised to Euclid. The main reason I think this is because, for all we know, SCP-2665-B could be housing some additional dangerous anomalies that the Foundation hadn't discovered yet, maybe? Or was it implied that the Foundation had already explored the entirety of the facility and found nothing else (if that's the case, then *facepalm*)

Overall though, solid and interesting SCP.

+1

Footnotes

1. THEKILLER(pick)AX

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minmin 26 Nov 2015 02:57

I'm bad at picking out the plot - what exactly is going on here?

Deacon_Blues_117 26 Nov 2015 05:07

Someone who works/worked at the modern-day Foundation was somehow transported back in time, where he founded his own version - with people he actually liked this time. Unfortunately, they weren't prepared for the things they found, and they didn't have MTFs or D-class to bear the brunt.

Thekillerax 26 Nov 2015 05:17

That's the gist of it, yeah.

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quantumshard 26 Nov 2015 04:58

No vote - while more information on the world the Foundation works in is nice, there are a few little grammar and wording mistakes, and the article itself doesn't quite have enough to it to get my interest.

I like this one.

BOXER9999 26 Nov 2015 08:34

Nice work both of you KilllerAxe and Amuness. This was really nice to read, I really liked the idea behind the SCiP.

Upvoted.

Professor Ritchie 26 Nov 2015 15:50

I like this skip, upvote for you!

I thought you did a really good job of bringing back the vanished agent in a way that was subtle enough to make you think a bit but not so much so that it becomes impossible to decipher what happened to him. Plus a decent amount of feels for these guys!

MrWrong 26 Nov 2015 16:32

I like the idea of some degree of humaneness in the Foundation-verse, although I dispute that breaking free of the Foundation itself is not a necessary means to that end. Rather, I am more intrigued by Foundation members lost in spacetime who still march on and fight the good fight despite it all.

For "John", upvote!

TL333s 26 Nov 2015 23:21

The unscientificness of the documents kind of threw me, but I get why they are the way they are. This is some really good story-telling, though I can't figure out if there's something else going on here, what with all the message-sending and memory-related anomalies they contained. I mean, given that that's the zinger, I'm just not quite piecing it together.

There are a few spots this could be improved, but I think it's good enough for an upvote. I really can't talk myself down from one.

Generation4 27 Nov 2015 03:55

I really liked this, not just because the specific story contained was good (which it was), but because there's a lot of room to expand on the idea of the ENCC in future articles should you guys choose to, which I hope you do. This actually kind of reminded me of Pitch Haven, and it has the potential to be even better imo.
Nevertheless, it's a good stand alone article. +1

Agent MacLeod 15 Apr 2016 00:55

The story isn't the most original, but it's cute (in the same way that the opening to Up is cute, not the same way, say, a puppy, is cute). My biggest problem is in the writing; there are slip ups away from Foundationspeak in the main part of the article, and I have trouble believing the ENCC text was written 160 years ago. Neutral vote for now, may revisit this later.

Thekillerax 15 Apr 2016 01:09

I'll probably give this article a once-over and clean up some stuff that people might find sloppy. Thanks for the feedback, Mac.

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And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.

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