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Can I ask for some elaboration on what can/should be added?
Yes, yes you can.
Corbenic is a huge place meant to be a hub to all the possible afterlives. You end up in the desert when you die, and you make your journey from there, utilizing skills you've learned throughout your life. Your final destination could be good or bad, and it all depends on your choices.
What it needs is -
- More places to go
- More dangers
- More ways in which a human can be permanently trapped in an eternal nasty situation for all eternity, or the omnipresent healing factor could be negated
- More races and creatures and monsters
MTF Omega-16 report transcripts would also be welcome, perhaps a new tab for that is in order. Keep in mind, the majority of them don't know they're not coming back.
Hmm… I can't really weigh in on this until there are Tales to show the flow of things. The concept of an MTF cruising the afterlives is interesting indeed, but one must lead by example (as a wise man once said).
More ways in which a human can be permanently trapped in an eternal nasty situation for all eternity, or the omnipresent healing factor could be negated
I wonder how many people are on the bottom of that river…
Hmm, you could always add a generic cliched dark shadow that just… kills stuff and keeps them dead.
SCP-PC-003 is one of the few entities in Corbenic known to eat. Striders have been known to collect wayward human subjects in stone baskets to feed SCP-PC-007. If captured for this purpose, it is crucial to cooperate and refrain from resistance.
I think this should be SCP-PC-007, since the Queen eats people.
Can I tie the reincarnating cult leader SCP into this?
I'm thinking he/she hangs out in this place between reincarnations, and forms cults here too, being the only person who can escape and return to the living world.
Adding a new area and transcript relating to the Marble Hall.
As this stands I'm afraid I have to downvote, while I like the idea it feels a bit bare bones right now.
I might very well change my vote if people are going to add to it.
I'm attempting to make a map of Corbenic's main understood area, which will be more full as we go along, naturally
Here is a partial map of Corbenic that I have constructed. Bear in mind that some of the areas haven't been described yet or placed yet. I leave those up to anyone who wishes to have input.
As for the area outside the boundaries of Corbenic, I haven't decided that either.
If I were you, I would make a more detailed map, but leave areas intentionally blank, for example if an object is expected to be in an area, but it hasn't been visited, then leave its map region blank,and sweet it is expected to be in that region
Hey, I'm interested in writing a transcript involving a group of MTF Ω-16 agents, and their first couple of days in Corbenic. Once I am finished with it, is it ok if I PM you to make sure the story fits within this collab?
Go ahead. Feel free to upload without my permission.
your hand-to-hand combat abilities, skills of judgment, and stamina are all exceptional,
These can't possibly be the main criteria for doing anything Foundation related. I don't care if earth weapons are available or not.
I am happy to note that none of you have read the documentation for SCP-2922. Hopefully, I will not have to stress the importance of not breaking into a document long since labeled for Level 5 clearance.
So why even bring it up? "You know that thing you haven't read? Yeah, don't read it."
I imagine if these people are really such high level operatives they shouldn't need to be super double reminded not to look at documents they're not cleared for.
and will possess levels of energy that render rest unnecessary. Injuries are also prone to regenerate.
Oh so… why does stamina matter again?
Corbenic is an extradimensional realm of undefined volume.
"size" maybe
Gravity, air, and temperature readings are all similar to that of Earth.
What the fuck is an "air reading"?
The sky maintains a pea-green color. Weather is generally unchanging, temperature is usually breezy cold.
"Dark" green. Okay, and when it's not like that it's… stormy? Typhoons? Radiation storms? Important info, that.
There are no day or night cycles
Singular.
a mountain range known as the Valley of the Striders.
Known by whom?
through the desert for as long as possible
That's descriptive.
dangerous native species of primate - the Striders, its namesake
Calling Striders primates seems to be highly presumptuous at best.
believed to be over 30 km in height.
The Chitin Sea
Seriously, who's naming this shit?
Betrayed the Foundation when we refused to meet special demands regarding her husband.
This is more of an SCP-2922 related complaint, but I really hate this whole story/character arc.
Teleportation to an unknown area, and
Wouldn't they just be disappearing from existence from our perspective?
to duty after defecation.
Excretion
Damn it, she was only 23.
Ahahaha what? Who the fuck cares how old the Agent was, this is the Foundation we're talking about.
As a side note, current pet peeves: Radio communication that doesn't use proper pro words. Also, wait, they can bring radios but not guns? What?
A bunch of humans in royal clothes piled on her like wild animals and dragged her kicking and screaming into the Marble Hall, tearing her apart with their bare hands.
Who talks like this?
Your fears are irrelevant.
There's literally no possible way to say this sentence and not sound like an evil overlord.
I'm drunk, you moron.
Yeah we're stuck in an alternate dimension with an important mission, but I guess there's time to get drunk and rant at our superior officer.
02 can come by too if he wants. It was real scary at first. They were trying to rip my skin open and use it as a hat. But then I saw that it happens to everyone here. The torturers and the tortured switch places all the time. Everyone kills and eats and fucks each other, and it's all one big joke, and I'm dying laughing! This is frickin' amazing.
Seriously, all your dialogue needs rewriting to sound like real people. Also, they're willing to say asshole and dick, but not fucking?
This is basically just worldbuilding notes posted on to the main site. It's interesting worldbuilding, but there's no story to make them worth posting. Two paragraphs of cheesy dialogue don't count.
Thanks for the notes regarding dialogue. PC-S12-1 has been changed accordingly. I understand that it might not be professional that S12-06 is "drunk-dialing" Henderson with SCP-2922, but bear in mind that she was just dragged into an eternal drunk blood orgy. :P
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