SCP-6136 / Discussion

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Fish^12 26 Feb 2022 05:53

Thank you to Felixou and NebulousStar for crits and being part of the team. Also, sorry carbon for pushing you off lc. It's survival of the fittest out here.

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Fun facts:

Initially, this was gonna be a lot more violent than it currently is. Like, Quentin Tarantino decided to remake 120 Days of Sodom, now with chainsaws. But then my team said "yo, wtf" and I toned it way down.

So the idea originally came to me because I was reading the wikipedia article for mnemonics and found out about the Knuckle Months. And then I combined that with my somewhat rational fear/fascination of pliers, and here we are. Also fun fact, I had a stray thought where I had really chapped skin on my lips, and peeling it eventually peeled my whole body away. I tried to pair that nightmare with the pliers, did not go as well as I had hoped.

This was also supposed to be way more encompassing, but then I decided to tone it down and focus on two people in an interrogation room. Like, I would've gone through several D-class to make a superpowered humanoid, but like, is that really interesting? Probably! But alas.

As for how the anomaly actually works, I intentionally made it inconsistent, as a parallel to how the researcher feels about his situation. Think of it as hard magic systems except for when it wasn't, and you've got a pretty accurate image of my writing process. The explanations offered are not 100% accurate, cause there was never a plan to begin with. :p


For the plot:

So basically, D-2002 gets Stockholm Syndrome, and Dr. Filia sees this happen in real time, and doesn't want any of it, so he cures this via exchanging some of his memories of freedom with D-2002's memories of torture, but Dhalia.aic doesn't want this to happen. This is what the second to last interview is about, how a lot of details about D-2002's life is fundamentally altered.

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basirskipreader 26 Feb 2022 08:45

this new atypical persuasion is better than the previous one, although it just cant help but put in some (in my opinion) really unnecessary gore. the dialogue was fun and it was cool to see the back and forth between the two, but a bit too arcane for its own good, as I had to open the spoilers to see what was even happening, and the ending dialogue with the AIC broke that flow between the two. overall, a better DAP, with some interesting nuggets of story there, but still bogged down by the need to have gore in it. novote

Fish^12 26 Feb 2022 14:15

That's fair! I also wanted to make the story closer to a vibe piece. A sort of chaotic mush.

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loddite 27 Feb 2022 00:26

ohhhh i see. dhalia wants to get filia's memories about a nice vacation since they can't go on one. shame they had to threaten insubordination to get filia to do that but at least now they'll both get a nice vacation out of it

Fish^12 27 Feb 2022 04:27

Valid!

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Rounderhouse 23 Mar 2022 01:38

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Tentative upvote. This is pretty well written and has a certain morbid charm to it that I like - it's disquieting in a certain way that suits the direction your Department seems to be going in. It reminds me of this, in a very good way. The 'gore porn' section with the pliers got a good reaction out of me too.

It's also inscrutable. I don't know whether that's a good thing or not. Hell, I might just be stupid — but I had to read the spoilers collapsible to understand what was going on, and even then I find myself thinking that the article is maybe a little too abstruse, you know? It's on purpose, but it hinders the wham moment at the end if you're not really sure what the hell you've been reading. But at the same time… that kind of enigmatic, understated horror - things left unsaid - contributes a lot to the disquieting atmosphere I like so much to begin with.

All in all, I'm very impressed by this. Well done.

Maxyfran73 23 Mar 2022 20:24

Gotta be honest, I thought the plot twist would have to do with some sort of exchange of memories at the end; wasn't sure where you wanted to drive this piece, and maybe that made the ending not land quite well imo.

The piece has an amazing atmosphere, and the dialogue's neat, but like Rounder said, it may be a tad too abstruse for its own good. The ending also just… I dunno, didn't land well for me. Might be because of the previous point though.

Overall… Ehh, upvote. I do still like it quite.