A thank you
I want to thank the following for helping me get this article where it is now. I couldn't have done without you.
REDESERT
Fish^10
Grigori Karpin
Naveil
PixelatedHarmony
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It's… okay? I don't see any reasons of why this should break the format tbf. Until I get an explanation that satisfies me, it's a downvote for me.
I forgot to use the reply function the first time.
I don't know if this will satisfy you or not. Still, the format break is that the person writing the article is 6892-1. It is to imply that the SCP is already established, and the anomaly and the idea of having the writer of the report in-universe being an active agent in the story being told.
And the way I had this setup, if I used the standard format, it wouldn't work.
Oh, don't get me wrong, I do get it, still I really don't see the Foundation make a Class E (I guess before actually being an SCP the ghost would be classified as Class E) write their own document. I also don't feel particularly touching the prayers and attendance part, because the researcher's still technically there, they could… just meet them, I guess?
I like this a lot. It's sweet and doesn't overstay it's welcome, definite +1 from me.
I don't know if this will satisfy you or not. Still, the format break is that the person writing the article is 6892-1. It is to imply that the SCP is already established, and the anomaly and the idea of having the writer of the report in-universe being an active agent in the story being told.
I’m not crazy about the format screw but I do like this article a lot. Took me a sec to understand it but I think it’s a nice subversion! +1
While I do agree with Siddhartha, I'm very susceptible to the pathos of maintaining respect for the dead.
O'Hara and Director Roberts, I would like to extend a thank you for your constant attendance and prayers on the anniversary of my death
I know I'm nitpicking, but I feel that this line was a little too tell-y. Like an announcement of, 'I've died and these two people are good to me.'
A slight bit more show, a slight bit less tell, and this piece would be stronger.
While I personally don't mind the format screw, I also think having it be a full document with the ghostly thank you from -1 in the Addendum would have been better.
As of now, no vote.
P.S.
I see Harmony lent you a hand in critting this article. I'll leave out any personal comments here; we all know her history, and we all have our own opinions.
However, I must say this:
Author, I respect the fact that you stick to your principle and give credit where credit is due, even if a name isn't too fondly remembered. I respect the shit out of that. That takes guts.
Thank you for saying so. I only learned after the fact of what went down.
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