SCP-6601 / Discussion

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(account deleted) 30 Sep 2021 15:52

I love SCP culture. Writing a formal SCP article has always been one of my biggest wishes.

As a non-native English speaker, writing a formal SCP article was a bit difficult for me. Fortunately, I had a lot of help from my friends. A special thanks to Re_spectators for his help, and to the seniors who were willing to give me the Green Lights for my concept in the first place! And thanks to CoolestShark,REDESERT, and many others who helped point out my SPaG mistakes!

If this article can be qualified, I will really be very happy. You are welcome to continue to help correct the basic mistakes that may exist in this article. I hereby sincerely thank you. ;)

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To smile, to dream, to be different.

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Clear Blue Sky 30 Sep 2021 16:06

+ Crit

I can see where this SCP is attempting to go, but it doesn't really end up progressing much. The SCP attempts to pull an emotional gut-punch and ending but doesn't reality justify it. The brevity doesn't help this much either, as it feels somewhat shallow and doesn't build up the impact much. The endnote reads unnaturally and doesn't seem like a genuine response. There are also some grammar and editing issues, such as;

She got better. Allot better.

Should be "a lot".

…I began to move frequently, try my best to change and improve.

Should be trying.

…Just when I was about to call my parents to greet, I found that…"

You should add a "them", to make it a "greet them". This sentence does seem kind of weird too; Why would you just randomly call your parents to "greet" them?

Overall, I can see the effort and there is a decent concept behind it. However, it's too unpolished and seems rushed. -1

(account deleted) 30 Sep 2021 16:16

Thank you for pointing out the mistakes! I'll correct the grammar problem.

Due to my limited English level, I can't express a lot of things I conceive. I'm really sorry. ;]

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Re Celare: Thanks! You have a point. I will try to modify it in my spare time.

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To smile, to dream, to be different.

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Celare 30 Sep 2021 16:19

Came here to say this exactly. I can't say I'm completely sold on the premise, but there is a lot to like here under the polish issues.

Beyond just SPaG, there's some other systemic problems as well, like how the interview logs are just raw exposition, and the weirdly melodramatic tone of the letter from Li.

Then there's the problem of the progression: we see that the anomaly can do this crazy thing in Li's head, but then it ramps back down to just having minor effects? Seems like it should be the other way around.

Nevertheless, I really like the themes, and the narrative of Li realizing his memory is being tampered with could be really cool if we saw more of it from his perspective.

I would probably give it a +1, if I saw it again in a more complete state. For now, I'm sorry, but it has to be a -1.

It reminds me of a novel called Ghost Written

Ishkur 07 Sep 2023 12:43

Did you read it before?

+1

secondvector 26 Sep 2025 04:23

Hi, this is my first post, actually. I really liked this entry, and it hit close to home as well. Hope you're doing good out there, (account deleted).