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It looks much better than last time I read it! Those little interactions and actions in between the talking really gives the characters and location a lot more life.
Would really enjoy seeing the CWPA expanded upon in future articles, maybe more entries of anomalous employee animals.
Metal dropped another banger 😳
Saw this as a draft and it was pretty damn good, still is! nice one metal
Ugh…anything with spiders causes my arachnophobia to kick in!
+1
where we landing? not tilted! ッ
He said it two times to make sure you understood it
Raccoon Noise
Very cute, very nice, very funny, and I wasn't expecting an animal jam reference, +1
That tiny crab has an attitude. I wonder what the CWPA was paying it in.
This just about falls into the +1 category (as opposed to novote) from me. It's a cute concept and is well written. The ending lines of dialogue are good. There's a few things here and there I think could be tidied up though:
No substances that could be identified as "pollution"
This is super broad, and thus verges (for me) on the unscientific. How do you decide what is and isn't pollution? Does this decision ultimately rest with 6922?
SCP-6922 is sapient and is capable of speech, and is capable of communicating clearly through water, as well as being capable of breathing air.
Could be streamlined to SCP-6922 is sapient and capable of speech, communicating clearly through water, and of breathing air. I feel "breathing air" could also be made far more clinical - what is it which stops micro crabs from usual being able to respire out of water?
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missing punctuation here
fucks
fuck's. (Personal preference, but I feel the repeated use of "fuck" undermines Lou's overall personality in the piece).
Enjoyed it overall though!
I love this. I hope the CWPA makes an appearance in future articles!
+1
Sincerely, a person who is definitely not a rock in disguise.
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