Don’t go shopping at abandoned stores, kids! You could light on fire! THIS IS NOT A DRAFT. THE FIRST DRAFT WILL BE MUCH CLEANER THAN THIS I PROMISE
I moved and trimmed your thread summary, since it was taking up extra space in the main forum screen. Try to keep thread descriptions (the text in the little box under the thread title) and titles short so you don't crowd out other authors in the forum listing. ~Zyn
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