Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

Summary:

First ever SCP article, the draft is finished do if you want to read that too, just let me know.

Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

Agent_Belial 09 Aug 2021 00:51

Seeking Greenlights: Yes

Page Type: SCP Article

Elevator Pitch: The SCP is basically a cassette Walkman (think MGSV) that when played, summons a wastelander from a parallel reality, he's from a version of earth the foundation failed to protect.

Central Narrative: The head researcher interviewing discovers that the wastelanders reality fell to an extinction level event that its reality's foundation couldn't prevent. When the event is listed on the file it gets censored.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: I figure I set up alot of intrigue with what happened to the wastelander's reality that'll peak curiosity. Ill develop other aspects of this narrative in other articles/tales. These are aspects im opened to other writters themselves developing with their own ideas.

Additional Notes: I've already written out the article so Id be mostly curious on my writing style and word choice. Of course, Id need the greenlight to post the idea.

Re: Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

SirPlant 09 Aug 2021 00:54

Don't be scared to extend the narrative a little bit, it makes it more intresting and more attention grabbing even with a few more words

Re: Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

Agent_Belial 09 Aug 2021 01:03

Ive been thinking about how, like at this moment the only I can think to add is how the wastelander works in this reality, how he can stay here indefinitely until 'killed' at which point he just returns to his reality, I added alittle section at the end stating he uses anomalous items to help him survive that aren't in the custody of this reality's Foundation but were in his.
And thats all I could think of.

Re: Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

SirPlant 09 Aug 2021 01:04

It's okay. I was just hoping for a little more story. If I could, I would think about green lighting this

Re: Want greenlight for an Idea I got cooking

Agent_Belial 09 Aug 2021 01:10

Well do you want to read it? Get a better feel for it

Forum Criticism Team - Junior Staff Post

Truc Linh 09 Aug 2021 03:19

Writerthatok, per the Site's Criticism Policy found here: http://www.scp-wiki.net/criticism-policy

Forum critique should be relatively in-depth.

Forum threads are made for in-progress concepts and drafts. You should make sure your critique is in-depth enough for the author to make substantial changes to their article (if necessary). What exactly within the narrative should the author extend on? In which direction would you like to see the narrative go? What makes the concept ready for a greenlight? What do you like and/or dislike about the concept? What could the author improve on?

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Agent_Belial, since this thread has been disrupted, please refer to this thread if you are in need of a reviewer:
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Forum Criticism Team - Mod Post

cybersqyd 09 Aug 2021 06:31

Locking this thread since it's a duplicate of: http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14153559/want-greenlight-for-an-idea-i-got-cooking

Agent_Belial, please don't create multiple threads for the same idea — if you want to add more detail to your pitch, please edit it into the original post instead (click the blue 'Options' in the bottom right corner of that post and then 'Edit' to do so — not the red 'Edit' at the bottom of the page)