Ok so I do really like the basic idea of the god of unrequited love making a love advice app, that's good. I also dig the interaction between him and the doctor at the end, that was fun. What I didn't like was the massive and fairly uninteresting excerpt from the Ethics Committee meeting in the middle of this. It was dense, kinda boring, and didn't feel like it was telling me anything that couldn't have been said in fewer words. It didn't help that the doctors involved didn't really feel all that different from one another. I recommend either rewriting that part or just axing it and putting the important details in an addendum, because it's a major pace killer here.
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Special thanks to critters like hungrypos, Mooagain, Eagleknight9, Grigori Karpin, Kantum, Machen, and Veralta for their input in this skip! This is probably gonna be my last one before Memecon, but I ain't holding my breath XD
Liked it as a draft, like it here. I'm glad I could be a part of making this wholesome little story!
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Reducing that log was exactly the move to take. While I'm not wild about the Avengers reference here, it's such a nonissue that it's not a problem. Well done, and well done taking in feedback
This is just such a nice history! We can even see what other organizations thought of him. This is so cute! Just some things could be said in less words but for me this doesn't metter as much as your writing style. Thanks for the history ^^
Really really like this. Relatively short and to the point. I feel it also subtly addresses some mental health issues, but that might just be my interpretation. Very well done. +1
I love how these two bonded together. From their last interaction, I have a headcanon where I think Dr Glass will use this app to vent and Himeros will try to be a good listener about it. Very wholesome!
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