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William Wettle's Redemption (?) Arc

Ihp 18 Apr 2021 19:25

I dislike flat characters.

No offense to HarryBlank here— he specifically created Wettle to be a comic relief/hate sink/butt monkey character. But after seeing him in Not My Sloths, Not My Pit and If You Don't Know The Words, I just knew that there had to be something more to this character, something that wasn't obvious at first glance.

So, I gave him a backstory. And a reason why he acts like such a douchecanoe. And I wrote and published it.

Thanks to HarryBlank for giving his approval, and Placeholder McD and Grigori Karpin for giving feedback. Enjoy!

HarryBlank 18 Apr 2021 21:17

Approval? I give my unconditional love to this thing. You made this dude come alive in a way I never really intended to, in an entertaining mystery/human relationships story the likes of which only you could pull off.

The Narrative followed Willie to Site-43, and the narrator came with. Thanks so much for writing such a kickass tale.

Grigori Karpin 28 Apr 2021 22:48

a) I love this a lot, it's an absolute redemption for an unredeemable @$$hole, but more importantly it has a terrific flow… The pacing works extremely well, and the explanation of the anomaly plaguing Wettle was interesting despite the possibility of being bogged down with technical details.

b) I want to thank you for making Harry's comment on SCP-5904 canon (I think we already considered it so, but now it's there in black and white):

"Surprised he hasn't tried to take a chunk out of me again."

Bastien bit into his slice of pizza before he comprehended what Dr. Lillihammer had said. "He what?"

"He got exposed to an anomaly that increased suggestibility, and when he said he wanted me to check it out, I told him to eat me. I still have the scar."

I straight up giggled when I saw this.

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Raptie 06 May 2021 07:31

Oh no, the level of extremely-well-told-meta stories is increasing at a dangerous level. D:

I can't upvote enough times for all of this stuff, ahhhh

meiyouNao 10 May 2021 22:54

So Sloth's Pit can trump luck so bad that it has failsafes that prevent it from being addressed that were perfect until just then? Obviously, the narrative all you writers create can already overcome any anomaly if you wish, but I've never appreciated the fact that the Pit's, and by extension the world's, narrative has that power as well. Also, glad to see Wettle become a bit more than he was. Even since I first saw he worked in Replications I was wondering what about his insufferable person made him fit in there, and now I know.

Canadians

meiyouNao 04 Jun 2021 16:20

Haich-Ee-Arr-Oh

Bastien being American, he would say "aich" not "haich".

Re: Canadians

LuciferM 27 May 2022 10:06

Came here to say this. I'm surprised it was mentioned so long ago and never fixed

LLLLLime 16 Sep 2021 19:49

self proclaimed "free thinkers" when four player chess

I really do like this. I like the idea of Wettle as a character, and this absolutely enforces that! Bastien is also a welcome addition, we always need more characters with slightly strange circumstances.

C-Dives 16 Oct 2021 09:45

This is definitely one of my favorite tales I've ever read, but there is one minor error that caught my eye.

"Like a jackass?" Wettle took out his coin and handed it to Bastien. "Call ten flips and do them."

"Uh… heads, heads, tails, tails, heads, tails, tails, heads, heads, heads?" He flipped the coin ten times— tails, tails, heads, heads, heads, tails, heads, tails, tails. "…not seeing the issue there."

Bastien actually only tossed the coin nine times here.

Edit: Thank you for fixing that so quickly, Ihp!

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Zyn 16 Dec 2021 07:11

Noting that a recent edit was reverted as it was a major change without indication of authorial permission being given. Editors, when making changes to other authors' pages that are beyond grammar/formatting fixes, please state in the discussion that you have permission from the original author to make the edit, and note what kind of record you have (e.g., screenshot) for confirmation if/as needed.

CHESS

ABadgerWhatsMore 24 Dec 2021 03:32

firstly great tale loved it.
whenever there is chess notation i pull out my chessboard and follow along.
the game played on the normal chessboard between Bastien and Wettle is in full

1. Nf3 Nf6
2. g3 g6
3. h3 d5
4. a4 c6
5. Ra3 e5
6. Nxe5 Nxe5
7. b4 a5
8. bxa5 Bxa3
9. Nxa5 Qe7
10. f4 Nf3+
11. Kf2 Nxd2
12. Bxd2 Ne4+
13. Ke1 Qxe3
14. Kf1 Qf2#

there are three illegal moves here
6. Nxe5 Nxe5 (Wettle's knights are on f6 and b8)
13. Ke1 Qxe3 (there is both no piece on e3 to take and Wettle's knight is on e4 blocking the move)
14. Kf1 Qf2# (Bastien's bishop is still on f1)
the obvious fix to the first illegal move is

4. a4 c6 -> 4. a4 Nc6

this keeps it legal until move 13
the best alternative to moves 13-14 I have found is

13. Ke1 Qxe3 -> Kf3 Qxa3+
14. Kf1 Qf2# -> Kg2 Qg3#

which looks worse and technically Qg3 should be Qxg3 so its not even fully correct.

Re: CHESS

Zyn 24 Dec 2021 08:22

Wow, this is impressive.

General heads up, might want to PM the author (Ihp) directly about this, since wikidot doesn't have automatic notifications for forum thread comments.

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