SCP-5748 "Meaningless Shapes and Noises"
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This reminds me of the movie Pontypool. Very good and original movie, I recommend it.
+1
Love language infecting scps.
I enjoyed this scip until the last two addendums. They read like overkill, and out of character for the Foundation (I know what a Thaumiel is, but it didn't feel justified in these cases.) I do appreciate the very end bit from the effected O5, but overall I think this article would do a lot better without the last addendums.
-1 (Sorry bud :( )
Hey, so I like the article, but I noticed that despite it being labeled as SCP-5748, all the mentions of the anomaly within the article say that it's SCP-5758. Just wanted to point this out. Maybe I missed something?
Good catch, I must have put the wrong number in by mistake when posting. It should all be fixed now. Thanks.
While I find the concept quite interesting, I have suspension of belief concerns about Addendum 3, as someone familiar with the real-life city of Durban.
For one, it is indeed a city of almost 4 million people, not a town as the article repeatedly states.
Secondly, as an important port city, disruption of Durban, whether due to the memetic religion or SCP-5748 deployment causing mass-cognitive failure, would cause wide-scale economic disruption across not just South Africa, but also neighboring countries that are landlocked (Botswana, etc.) or that import much of their goods via South Africa (Namibia). It would immediately be all over the news everywhere and you would have to administer amnestics to half a continent to cover it up. (An actual real life analogy would be the civil unrest in that area of South Africa that happened just recently.)
Lastly, a contagious memetic religion that infected most of Durban would already have spread elsewhere. Major ports are, of course, epidemiological weak links.
If you are adamant about keeping the Addendum, I would change the location to a smaller in-land settlement, of which there are hundreds. Many of these places are rural and have an aging population, which would allow for the cover story of the induced cognitive failure being due to dementia.
Once again, liked the concept, but as it stands I neither upvoted nor downvoted.
Given that SCP-6111 now exists and doesn't fit the description given here, I think it'd make sense to either change the number or black box it.
Beyond that… novote. As some others have mentioned, the addendums feel a bit unnecessary, as does the picture IMO. It's a good concept, but I feel like the piece could use some more polish.
Extremely interesting concept, but the execution's a tad wonky, especially the addendums. I think the first one's fine, but the other two don't really work for the piece. The second is a bit random considering the rest of the piece in that it doesn't really adds much, and the third one is a complete shift that doesn't really works all that well. Thus, you end up with a piece that feels all over the place while also not having much content on these three addenda.
-1. It needs some polishing to really shine, as the idea here is really good but the execution lags behind.
Not a bad concept by any means, but it has been done before and done better. I forget the number, but one of them is about a journal that makes people who know about it loose the ability to speak… At first. Then in a revision it became anyone who noticed the effect. Then it became speaking, singing, and writing in the next revision. Then it became sign language and gestures of communication in the fourth. The final revision is just a guy staring blankly at the camera, a full video, where they plead behind very sad eyes that you understand them and can think of a way to fix this lifted veil end of the world where no one can communicate at all.
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