Beauty in it's simplicity. I love it.
Reminds me of an older-series one, in a good way. Straightforward, weird, tonally spot-on, with lovely details and enough intrigue to elevate it.
"Gunpowder" feels nonspecific. Is it with Sodium Nitrate or Potassium Nitrate? Is it serpentine or corned?
Edit: I realize that wasn't clear. "Gunpowder" is a solid mixture of charcoal, sulfur, and an oxidizer (either potassium nitrate or sodium nitrate) and different powders have different compositions. So this seems incredibly imprecise, here.
Thank you. I'd been considering how to describe its fuel, and unsurprisingly overlooked probably the easiest way to manage it.
To everyone else, I greatly appreciate the criticisms, and'll be trying to take them all into consideration with future writings. I may come back to this one at some point, though I'm somewhat indisposed towards re-hauling posted content. Much is appreciated anyways, and I look forward to running through it all next time!
Over +20 seems like a reasonable point to not futz with it, IMO.
This is so cute and slightly daunting at the same time. It's just like a DIY version of the Voyager Golden Record.
It's just like a DIY version of the Voyager Golden Record.
I agree, but I consider this a weakness rather than a strength. It's exactly like Voyager, but with kids tacked on for nostalgia and feels in a way that feels very artificial. There's just not anything that interesting to me about this concept, and it's too simple to convince me otherwise.
I kinda took it as an alien virsion of the voyager one gold disk. LIke earth was it's destination
as far as the scp goes. I like it just enough to up vote. It peaks my intrest just enough, and there is enough of a pay off to make it work.
I disagree with its properties, I surely love the idea and the story behind but I just don't get the anomalous effects, it seems so random.
A downvote for now.
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I get the story you're trying to tell, but with this level of development it's fairly thin, and it's relying far too much on the picture. "Going to space through the power of imagination" isn't a trope that I have ever enjoyed around here, and this is the bare elements of that archetype without much to make it memorable.
Upvoted because it manages to combine nostalgic warm fuzzies with plausible orbital mechanics.
(twelve second burn every few hours for several decades adds up to a lot of delta-v…)
I want to like this, but there's just not enough here. Even if you just added more to the capsule, or if it were more alien, just something to give it that little extra jazz and push it over the top. Conceptually, I like it, but it's not there yet. -1
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
I like this a lot. This just felt very refreshing to read, it has a classic skip feel. (also, I really wanna believe that the crossed-out 'sun' wasnt really a mistake after all.)