Just End Me - SCP concept

Summary:

This is another SCP concept that I'm making, and this one is pretty dark and disturbing. Hope it's okay.

Just End Me - SCP concept

Gheen 16 Feb 2021 23:27

Seeking Greenlight: Yes

Page type: SCP Article

Genre: Emotional, Dark, Horror

Elevator Pitch: An american male humanoid that has a limited amount of lives. It has a set of single numbers on the back of the humanoid. Each life counts as a casualty is caused by the humanoid male ending itself. It will try to find any weapon or try to find ways to end its life. However, for some unknown reason, when the humanoid male asks for assistance with accomplishing this goal, they will simply refused, and the male will then start to get agitated and angry. It's purpose is to "seek peace", but if all the lives get to zero, the world will end in a horrific fate.

Central Narrative: This is part of my story concept, The Adventures of the Lonely. This SCP is a dangerous threat to mankind, and must not let its goal be completed. The male will begin to show more of its sad backstory, which will conclude to why it wants to end itself once and for all.

Hook/ Attention-Grabber: This SCP is kinda sad, because the backstory is very heartbreaking and the humanoid male won't ever find peace until he finally dies, but also scary to see that a man struggle to find a way towards his death, when he doesn't know or care that ending his life will bring destruction to the whole world. Not to mention that it would build itself to do whatever it takes to take itself out.

Additional Notes: I have some concerns about this SCP, that this will is a SCP that wants to end its life. Considering do I have to not put too much wording of "death" into this SCP Article. Also, if I may, can I put some gore into the SCP Article as well, it won't be too much I'll put in, just a little bit in the Article?

Re: Just End Me - SCP concept

Dr Hajovsky 17 Feb 2021 01:50

Hi there Gheen, let's take a look at your concept.

+ show block

Overall:
I'll start off by saying it's a little difficult to judge the potential of your concept since a large portion simply describes the direction you want to take it rather than an actual goal. For instance, telling us the backstory will be heartbreaking is all well and good, but it doesn't tell us why it will be an emotional experience for the reader.

While the concept of a character longing for death has been done before, there's always room for exploration into new territory. From that angle, how are you planning to use the character's backstory and anomalous properties to explore the themes of depression and suicide?

On the topic of the man's death relating to the end of the world, it's a little vague, but I think there's some great opportunity for narrative development, which I'll cover in a bit.

Specific:

It's purpose is to "seek peace", but if all the lives get to zero, the world will end in a horrific fate.

How did the Foundation discover this? Later on, you mention that the man may or may not know what will happen if he exhausts all his lives, if it's the latter, how would the Foundation know that his last death would cause the end of the world?

Also, what exactly is the horrific fate the world would experience? This is a great way to tie the feelings of your character, with the way the world ends being a reflection of how they feel.

I have some concerns about this SCP, that this will is a SCP that wants to end its life. Considering do I have to not put too much wording of "death" into this SCP Article. Also, if I may, can I put some gore into the SCP Article as well, it won't be too much I'll put in, just a little bit in the Article?

Taboo topics are perfectly fine to write about, as long as they serve a narrative purpose and are done tastefully. If the gore is simply telling us how the man has tried to kill himself or what happened in his past, then its purpose is to show us his inner turmoil. As long as it accomplishes that in a reasonable way, it should be fine.

Advice:
As for where to take this narrative, one of course of action would be to have the man be a former Foundation agent, perhaps part of an MTF. MTFs are often see some of the worst and most disturbing anomalies, and this also serves as an easy way to have them obtain their anomalous characteristics. Perhaps one day while investigating a potential anomaly, the man is accidentally given these properties.

Alternatively, perhaps they didn't realize they had these properties until something tragic happens, like the death of a loved one or their entire family. He then tries to end himself, only to discover he has more than one life. (Perhaps the tragedy happens anomalously, thus attracting the Foundation and giving him the multiple lives.)

As another different direction, perhaps the man is some kind of physical manifestation of the planet earth. This does create some narrative questions like why is the planet earth depressed and it would probably require the scrapping of the multiple lives aspect. Still, this perspective opens up some interesting territory.

Feel free to reach out to me if you have any questions or want me to do a follow up, as I might not see it otherwise. Good luck with your concept!

Re: Just End Me - SCP concept

Gheen 26 Feb 2021 02:31

Thank you for viewing my concept! I hear your overall critique, and I would want to describe it a little more as I realized that I’ve forgot to put more information to this SCP.

First, The goal for this SCP is to find a way to end his life. Not just that it wants to end himself for nothing, he wants to do this for one purpose. That purpose is being with the love of his life, who is in the afterlife. I’ve actually want this concept to tell a story of his life before being contacted by the foundation. I planned to do that by the SCP getting interviewed on, and he tells his story of how his life turn upside down. How he loses his family, loses his job and house and the most important person that keeps him sane, his girlfriend.

In addition to your question about how the foundation finds out about his anomalous property is by him ending his story with a little twist. That story concept that I’m making, is where it all comes to play. He talks about this unknown organization that uses anomalies for “the greater good”, and cages the bad ones to find a cure for them. However, this organization finds out about how his anomalous properties work after reports of a man surviving a fall from a 50m building, and following it is a causality right after the man's suicide attempt. They then predict after experimenting him that if he reaches to 0, then something bad will happen to earth due to many times he tries to harm himself. The problem was though: How would the world end? Which is the scary part about this SCP, because they can't risk the world being in danger then, or even if they knew how to stop it. Although, it’s too late and he escapes, which leads him to one of the SCP Foundation base afterwards.

Finally, I wanna put a few more points on this scp anomalous properties that I forgot to put in.

• Every time when 12:00 A.M. hits, the number goes back to the amount of lives before, and the casualties will disappear the next day, as if nothing ever happened.
• When the number of lives decrease, the more deadly the casualties will be.
• The wounds that the SCP makes stays for about 10-25 minutes before going back to normal.

That is all, and again, thank you for taking your time with my SCP concept. Hope you have great rest of your day!

Last edited on 11 Mar 2021 13:35 by Gheen Show more