a hilarious adventure into the human consciousnesses
that image is making me lose my damn mind
pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming
You've somehow managed to make a Benny Hill chase into an SCP and I'm all here for it. There's a good escalation between the logs, and your writing style makes the action particularly easy to follow. Roll on Season 2.
Hi Author, I've noticed a few typos.
The current will be worth as much as the gold making up the consumed 5083-1's body.
Should "current" here be currency? This sentence also doesn't read well (in my opinion). I think it'd be better phrased as:
Individuals who have consumed portions of 5083-1 will receive a sum of currency
proportional to the quantity of gold they ingested.
O5-11: (pauses) …Apolagies.
This is a really imaginative SCP, but the main problem I have with it (and why ultimately I decided on a neutral vote) is the reaction of the Overseer Council. In the description you state:
Unless they have undergone at least Level 3 memetic agent resistance training, any
further people that see 5083-1 after initial manifestation will gain the same desires
to consume them.
For me, I find it hard to believe that field agents and MTFs would have this memetic resistance training, but not the O5 Council. I know the O5s don't operate in the field, but they are, after all, the most important people within the Foundation, and not people you want compromised.
O5-4 runs towards Alpha-1-5, twists his face into a cognitohazardous facial expression
I'm not sure what this is meant to mean? Are you saying O5-4 is contorting his face in a way that makes it a cognitohazard?
Ultimately, I was more interested in Operation Lifeboat than the skip itself. Moreover, I don't feel like Eunike 185 added anything to the story. In my opinion, if it was removed it it wouldn't change much (unless Operation Lifeboat and Eunike 185 are linked?)
As a courtesy to our readers on mobile devices, please collapse long posts. ~Zyn
Are you saying O5-4 is contorting his face in a way that makes it a cognitohazard?
Yes.
My eyes glazed over when it came to the random, endless antics - I think those sections could have been dramatically shortened.
Having said that, I loved the listing of departments, and the "Aye… want to eat that gold man" was absolutely brilliant.
Overall, +1
