A Medicinal Replicator (Just looking for feedback)

Summary:

A device that replicates medications directly into a patient.

A Medicinal Replicator (Just looking for feedback)

errorexe3 30 Oct 2020 17:39

Seeking Greenlights: No.

Page Type: SCP Article

Genre: Light Drama

Elevator Pitch: A 2 piece (-1 and -2) device that when Medicine is put into it (Not limited to medicine) will manifest within the patient without consuming the external supply. The device can only give a patient material equal to the volume of the storage part of the device (-2) at a time. Disconnecting and reconnecting the storage (-2) will allow you to activate the effect again as often as you'd want. No needles, no puncture, over time the medicine is just present within the bloodstream.

Central Narrative: This device will have been gifted by an unidentified GoI to a non-anomalous Paramedicine company. The Foundation will fail to contain the item once because the unknown GoI will steal it and return it to the Paramedicine company.

Hook/Attention-Grabber: Because of how "safe" the item is, the item wont be under much security en-route to the storage site allowing it to be stolen during that time and later returned to the Paramedicine company. The Foundation will contain it again under heavier security measures.
Because of how useful and mundane the item is there will be discussion about the Foundation using it themselves.

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Finally there will be suspicion about the staff at the Paramedicine company, in interviews they'll be awesome at answering questions until the topic of the object comes along…

Additional Notes: I want the SCP item to be a catalyst for the events. The Foundations questionable ethics is present in many stories and I enjoy having that topic in articles one way or another so it will be touched on lightly here. I'm excited to put to paper the test logs but I'm not going to make them super gruesome, I want to demonstrate how dangerous the item can be if used improperly though.

I don't really understand how to write "Video logs."Which is how I want to describe the incident of the item getting stolen.

The story in many ways this isn't very exciting except for the incident of it being stolen, it will likely suffer because of the previous point.

The story may be uninteresting in general if I put it to paper.

Is this idea worth pursuing and refining with my limited experience?

As a courtesy to our readers on mobile devices, please collapse long posts. ~Zyn

Last edited on 31 Oct 2020 04:07 by Zyn Show more

Re: A Medicinal Replicator (Just looking for feedback)

Naveil 01 Nov 2020 21:40

I think one important thing to note is that an idea doesn't have to be "exciting". You can tell something emotional without the need for much action, or just make something small and rompy that implies a whole lot more.

I think the important thing here will be to nail down a specific direction you want to go in. While the topic of ethics is one thing, the object getting stolen is another. These are two clashing themes, and you have to ask yourself if they go well together, or if one is directly clashing against the tone of the story you're trying to create. Do you want to create an exciting, action based skip? Or should it be more light and melancholic?

If I were to give advice on how to proceed, I'd recommend you take the approach of Foundation ethics. It's not a particularly uncharted area of writing, but I feel it's more suited towards what you're trying to create. Elements like the heist and so on could stand to be passing mentions more than anything.

Try to go a bit more in detail with your narrative, and what it entails. The emotions you're trying to create, and what areas you're exploring.

Re: A Medicinal Replicator (Just looking for feedback)

errorexe3 02 Nov 2020 17:22

Thank you for your feedback, I will attempt to give the article more of a focus.