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And there she is: My first SCP. I hope you enjoy it!
Thank you to Riemann,
Grigori Karpin,
RockTeethMothEyes, and
forbiddenquest for helping me flesh out my idea,
and a BIG thank you to:
For helping me iron out my draft!
(Also thank you to RhettyBoy for giving my MTF the name "Sniffle Squad" among other stuff)
Feel free to drop any suggestions for improvement below!
Just like during critique I think that this is a phenomenal idea and I love it as an entry! This is exactly the kind of short, weird anomaly that made me fall in love with the wiki originally!
Plus it’s hilarious as hell and I just love it for all that it is
I was very iffy on this, but I think I'm going to upvote. While incredibly, incredibly silly, this is by far not the most absurd thing on the site to be taken with a grain of seriousness (not even the only one involving the goddamn president). Additionally, random phenomenon correlation is always a fun avenue for SCPs, and I think this article pulls the 180 turnaround spectacularly. +1
Yeah I still fondly remember that stone created by the Soviet GRU that creates giant snakes that try to kill the current President of the United States.
What?
scp-2762! A carved stone snake, in the style of ancient Mesoamerican cultures. Every full moon at solar midnight as experienced by the President of the US, it sucks up 10 cubic meters of matter then disgorges it in the form of a 17 meter long animate snake that tries to kill and eat the president.
I love how it went from a safe class nose itch to a keter asteroid-crashcourse-resettimer.
Good use of MTF, hell you even named one "Sniffle Squad".
Props on the good dialogue which includes: a believable call, Joe Biden - Obama bromance, Trump's way of addressing things
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The way you edited two pictures together to make T-128C is also very nice.
+1
I really wanted to like this. As has been pointed out, there are some pretty top tier lines in this article, such as "Obama, scratch your fucking nose!" It's clear that there was a lot of thought put into the article, and the fundamental premise is brilliant.
Unfortunately, this article is weighed down by so much extra cruft that it hides the real gems like those lines. The dialogue for most characters comes across as such a caricature of real life that it goes beyond silly into so absurd as to break suspension of disbelief. A feather tickling device to make the president scratch his nose in his sleep? That's beyond "wacky;" it's nonsensical.
Furthermore, for me to accept the world of this article, I have to decide that, not only is the president kept in the dark about the Foundation for some reason, this is also a universe where the Foundation resorts to slapstick hijinks, full frontal assaults on the White House, and fake phone calls rather than any sensible solution, which is too far for me. Foundation agents somehow both casually stroll into the White House in one event while rooftop snipers start shooting at them in another, which shows off the lack of even internal consistency.
Honestly, I originally thought the article was going to end at just the first page, and I dreaded seeing a second. The first page was so brilliantly bizarre that I loved it. There was enough there to work as a perfect unexplained mystery, and the premise suggests so much more than is said. The reveal that this nose scratching is fundamentally vital to our continued existence brought it down in my opinion, because it revealed too much behind the curtain-but it still would have been fine had the rest of the implementation not brought it down. All in all, it's a very promising idea that falls flat for me in its execution.
I appreciate you taking the time to read my article and leave your thoughts! I guess I'll say a few things:
A feather tickling device to make the president scratch his nose in his sleep?
If it works, it works. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Furthermore, for me to accept the world of this article, I have to decide that, not only is the president kept in the dark about the Foundation for some reason
Okay, so, (in my headcanon at least), the foundation CANNOT tell elected officials about the veil or the anomalous. What if Trump wakes up one day and decides to tweet about the aliens? What if Bernie Sanders decides to tell the world about their D Class experiments? The veil is fragile, and they can't risk giving information to anyone aside from their most trusted.
Foundation agents somehow both casually stroll into the White House in one event while rooftop snipers start shooting at them in another, which shows off the lack of even internal consistency.
Well, these were two entirely different situations. The first situation was just an ordinary day with ordinary security. In the second one, they were on extremely high security. The White House was barricaded, and the President was escorted to a secure bunker that's literally designed to protect the president from an aerial attack on Washington.
Despite having SS credentials, they were denied access and had to forcefully bypass the police line. When they literally beat their way through, the WH assumed they were being attacked by some kind of paramilitary organization, hence the response. (And as stated, their communications were jammed by agents embedded in the WH)
So you’re telling me that the Foundation has the ability to erase a siege on the White House from the global consciousness using a single task force but can’t just engineer a meme that will cause the President to itch and scratch his nose at the required time? This article falls into a specific class of frustrating where I have to accept a cascading number of weird gotchas that simply don’t have a good in-universe justification and baldly exist to force the Foundation to do some exactingly dumb thing.
This is indeed one of the best articles I've read, although I have some concerns with Incident 5092-1-B…
[…] would collide in 1hr and 15m at 21:10.
At 21:38, MTF Theta-20 successfully neutralized the threat.
At 20:07, Area-32 reported that SCP-5092-1 had dematerialized.
Is it just me or those times don't check?
Man I KNEW I would mess up the numbers somewhere…
Thanks for pointing this out.
[…] would collide in 1hr and 15m at 21:10.
At 20:19, MTF Theta-20 successfully neutralized the threat.
At 20:21, Area-32 reported that SCP-5092-1 had dematerialized.
Is it just me or these times still don't check?
Uh. 5092-1 materialised at 19:53 and Theta-20 achieved the mission goal about 30 minutes later…
Area-32 reported -1's materialisation at 19:55. 1hr and 15m later is 21:10.
Welp, apparently this time it was just me. Forgive me, sometimes I appear to be unable to read
