SCP-5539 / Discussion

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cptnubz 12 Oct 2020 19:49

Thanks for reading. Had this one sitting around for a long time and decided it was high time I finish it.
Image sources in order of appearance

• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Ladies_dames_toilet_sign_Jersey.jpg
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:20060305Dongshi_Taiwan_Police_Household_visit.jpg – I have digitally altered this image by pixelating the subjects’ faces
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:1st_Medical_Bn._sailors_train_with_new_life_support_system_140224-M-KO203-949.jpg
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Sagittaire-Caisson_decompression-IMG_9359.JPG
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Monteregian_Hills_from_space.jpg
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:AS09-26A-3741A_-_Apollo_9_-_Apollo_9_Mission_image_-_S0-65_Multispectral_Photography_-_Mississippi_-_NARA_-_16674946.jpg
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Mt_Taranaki_(Satellite_picture).jpg
• https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:ISS-30_Nighttime_view_of_Shanghai.jpg

Amazing!

SDC16 13 Oct 2020 17:41

This gets my +1. The writing throughout was clear, the concept intriguing and entertaining, and the story of experimentation and its conclusion very original. My only suggestion for improvement would be to include the region of discovery for the SCP. Since the writing is in both English and French, I would suggest Quebec or Montreal. Otherwise, great job!

Genshed 13 Oct 2020 20:03

This started out moderately amusing and proceeded to a achieve escape velocity into amazing weirdness. Nicely paced, good logs, great finish.

Tovarisch_Pootis 14 Oct 2020 07:55

+1. The pacing is lovely, the narrative is entertaining throughout. Though some might argue that this is too lighthearted, it fits solidly. Good job!

A Random Day 14 Oct 2020 14:43

I just can't buy that anyone would get so invested in a bathroom sign that teleports drunk people that they would replace someone's entire blood supply with alcohol to test it, much less that they could convince other people to follow through with it.

RadioactiveRADS 22 Oct 2020 18:39

This felt lackluster. The idea in itself is ridiculous, but the beginning got me to think you were going to play on this idea which would have made this article better for imo. Just like ard said, it is unbelievable that the Foundation would allow this to happen and the article doesn't really give us a good accuse on why this is continuing.

Also, the ending didn't do much for me, it felt like it came out of nowhere and the implications weren't that good.

However, your writing was solid and it flowed well.

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