While I noticed some minor outdated stylistic choices ["One (1)" for example] this was overall an enjoyable and creepy piece.
I'll be crossing you in style, someday!
Whilst I agree with the above about some of the stylistic choices, as a concept this creeps me the fuck out.
+1 for sure.
i love this so much famine
1+
pastarasta1 is quick-talking and often scheming
Liked this when you originally showed it to me, but wow the dialogue bits really sell it.
Yet another nightmare from Famine, nicely done
+1
Also there’s some particularly good lines here that give some meaty clues I wanna shout out:
“We can be human, yeah we can be respectful, but we can't tolerate chaos.“
And
“SCP-5456 consisted of 146 long term members, each of which were commonly employed as business owners, landlords, military, law enforcement, or those in similar positions of authority, and related family.”
Wait, tag what? haha I wasn't trying to bum rush you into giving me crit credit haha
Oh one thing:
(sound of a continuous stream of water hitting a larger body of water)
I feel like this might work better for what you want if you replaced the first "water" with "liquid"
Tag it as Fifthist. In this case the Fifthism manifests itself through crossfit cultism. You can still read it however you want, it being open to interpretation is a feature. It being Fifthist is just my headcanon.
Also nice catch thanx
Didn't understood what happened to the members, but it crept me after i've reached the 4th paragraph of the Description. nice music btw :) imma keep it UwU
+1
Not actually that well aware.
It's pretty much whatever you think happened to them. They could have all just ran away and this isn't even anomalous.
Conversely, upvoted because I have no idea what is going on (but there is enough consistency in flavor that I feel there is something substantial if dreamlike happening). It's been a while since an SCP made me feel this…unease of ambiguity.
Goddamn it faminepulse, no one does horrifyingly ambiguous dialogue like you do! It is a crime that this is so underrated.