The concept:
Elevator pitch: Basically he's a giant pink man with an armoured* body and giant sword who can heal anybody but depending on your past action he will most likely do 1 of three things heal you and make you stronger or faster if you're an amazing person, just heal you normally if you're a regular person but if your evil it would heal your body but mess with your mind or might heal you so much you disappear
The skips effects seem to take most of the focus, which does concern me as the effects will not be able to carry this article alone. As a result of all the focus being on the effects, the rest of skip seems to lack an explanation. I'm confused as to why its pink?, what its purpose/motives are, why/how it has this "sword" and what constitutes as being a "bad" or "good" person. Imo those categories are fairly broad/vague, not to mention "good" and "bad" is bijective.- There isn't really a way to pass an absolute, hands down judgment on it.
Overall the skip seems to have "x-man syndrome", which is essentially where the skip becomes more of a "super-powered human", rather than an SCP. This issue is one of my biggest concerns here, as the pitch sounded closer to a "super-powered human", rather than an SCP. Most of my concerns with this particular aspect have been covered by Riemann.
Another issue that arises here are the Foundations interactions with it (or lack there of), I'm not sure how the Foundation discovers the skip or how they interact with it in general.- This is more of a narrative issue though.
Should be noted that humanoids are among the hardest SCPs to write, as they are very prone to falling into cliches. I would recommend you look at shelving this for the time being, and coming back to it when you've got a little more experience in working skips.
The narrative:
central narrative:temporary none
I would highly recommend you start working on a narrative. While it isn't required for a successful article, they keep audience engagement and can further explain the skip. Modern audiences tend to favour narratives, which has more or less lead to them becoming the standard.
hook:
Hook/Attention-Grabber the punished healer had been around for centuries and when is around children is treated as an uncle even tho he is very big and odd looking and seem to immune to many other SCP like scp-049 and scp-035 and seem to b aware of many SCP’S that not even the foundation is aware of and believe he is always healing people even when the person dies.
The links to famous SCPs concerns me, the article shouldn't be relying on name drops for attention. As it will take away focus from your skip, and turn the article in a "what would [insert SCP here] do in [insert situation here]". To add on to this, the SCPs listed here don't feel necessary or relevant to the your skip. They're kind of just there to be there? -I would recommend you try to avoid cross linking for now, as it can be quite finicky (not to mention that linking to famous SCPs isn't really received to well).
Other than the crosslinks, this doesn't look like much of a hook? it didn't really give anything attention grabbing per se, more so it gave additional info on the skip. Overall I'm not sure why its interaction with children would be important, its not really related to anything else, and its not really brought up again.
Notes:
Addition Notes I suffer from dyslexia, so I probably made a hundred of spelling or grammar error
I did notice that there is a lack of punctuation in the pitch, in any case, I would recommend you look over your post to double check everything makes grammatical sense. As bad spelling/grammar can make it harder to be taken seriously.
Red or green?
Due to my afore mentioned concerns, no Greenlight. Overall, I would recommend you look at shelving this for the time being.
Though If you do want to continue this regardless, then here's what I feel needs work- The skip currently doesn't seem to have much behind it, the only thing I really have to go by are the effects, (that personally, don't really grab my attention to begin with). I would recommend you add in narrative as soon as possible (it will help immensely), and look into the skip itself more. what are its motives, why is it the way it is ect.
With that said, feel free to let me know if/when you decide to elaborate on this further (or if you have a new concept in general). Response times range from 2-12 hrs over PMs. Do note the butterfly squad is a great place for second takes if your looking for more critters. :)
