The concept:
Elevator Pitch: This is an old building with no real history, that holds paranormal properties. It holds the appearance of an old farm house. The idea though is that once a person enters the facility, all negative emotions they hold wash over them. This then leads to their fears and/or emotions becoming manifest within the household, which can then cause physical harm to them. The creatures conjured cannot leave the facility, and tend to disappear once the subject is either dead, insane, or has somehow left the premises.
My biggest concern here is that this comes of as your run of the mill haunted house, though the effects are certainly more unique, I wouldn't say that I'm confident in them. As they seem to fall into a "it'll kill you" or a "it'll make you go insane" cliche. Personally, its something I've seen done a fair bit, and it imo it comes across as a quick way to grab audience attention.
Along with this, the house isn't given much else than the effects, I'm interested to know why the house is like this, or what its history is (what happened at this "farm house"). What are its motives, its purpose? -Adding in these details could help the skip distance itself from the afore mentioned cliches, as you would be establishing a genuine reason for its actions/effects.- Saying the house has no history feels like a quick way to avoid explaining the skip further, I would recommend you give its history some thought.
The narrative:
Central Narrative: Discovered within the Willamette forest of Oregon, the house quickly became apparent to the agent that it was not just an abandoned house. Panic instantly set in as they scanned the dark, dingy room for a source of whatever seemed to be watching them. Shadows seemed to dart out of the corner of their eyes as they searched frantically. Stepping back nervously, the fear of being buried alive flickered among their thoughts briefly. That's when the agent discovered that something had begun wrapping around their legs, and began quickly pulling them into the dirt floor.
Screams erupted over the audio feed from the agents headset, followed by muffled panic and then static. The doors were quickly flung open by two additional agents, who only found the house now empty.
From what I understand you plan to have this an an exploration log. which in of itself is fine, though I'm not seeing much else around that. The story seems to be missing a setup and payoff, as the Foundation already seems to found the skip/started to experiment. The story also seems to be missing an overarching plot/arc, which makes it a bit hard to see this as a story (it more or less feels like an isolated event at the moment).- as a result of this, I'm not given really given enough time to empathise with the characters, so their deaths don't really leave an impact on me.
I'm a little confused on how the Foundation came across it to begin with, as this house itself is off the grid, and you would need to actively explore to find the anomaly in the first place. Along with this, I'm unsure of why the Foundation didn't send in a D-class first. Assuming they would be unsure of the skips effects, it sounds a bit more reasonable to send someone expendable in first.
Hook:
Hook/Attention-Grabber: Creepy building that can make your fears and negative thoughts amplified, that can then manifest.
The hook concerns me a bit, considering the only thing of note here is a "spooky house". There isn't much that really makes this unique and/or interesting. As there are already a fair few SCPs that are based around haunted houses.
Red or green?
Due to my afore mentioned concerns, no Greenlight. Overall I' would you recommend you give the some more detail, look into the houses history, the characters and their fears ect. I feel this article has potential, though currently it seems to fall into a few cliches.
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