Thanks to Meska, Niblic, DrUnoriginal and Justice for their always valuable feedback!
PLEASE DON’T SUE TANHONY:
"Jimmy, put the water back!!!" by jepoirrier is licensed under CC BY-SA 2.0
Thanks to Meska, Niblic, DrUnoriginal and Justice for their always valuable feedback!
PLEASE DON’T SUE TANHONY:
"Jimmy, put the water back!!!" by jepoirrier is licensed under CC BY-SA 2.0
Once again, Tanhony proves to us that the ability to enjoy an SCP thoroughly and without hesitation is not the least bit reliant on the reader's ability to understand what is happening. This has the simplicity and creepypasta-esque mysterious nature of a series 1 SCP with the clinical, formal tone and high quality writing of a current one, especially written by the man behind the slaughter.
then proceeding to scream hysterically and run towards the nearest wall despite the efforts of security and testing personnel to restrain it. It then began rapidly striking her head against said wall with great force, falling unconscious after five strikes.
Was the change in pronouns between "it" and "her" intentional? Other than that, this was quite creepy and piqued my interest.
+1
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That was unintentional and now fixed, thanks for the spot and the vote! :D
Except that it's supposed to be spelled "its" without an apostrophe…
Maybe quote the portion of text with the typo? "It's good" is correct punctuation in the context of the above comment.
My bad, I meant a portion of the file.
"It then began rapidly striking it's head against said wall with great force, falling unconscious after five strikes."
You know you can make proofreading edits on pages, right?
I didn't know that actually, thanks for pointing it out! Fixed it.
Short and sweet. It's got a punchline that I didn't catch too early because of the initial focus on the hypothetical water's physical properties. It landed nicely.
+1.
Maybe I'm missing something but the ending seems to come out of nowhere and is extremely campy with bad creepypasta vibes.
Also what happens if you just swim in it without drowning? Is there still suicide?
I don't know if I'm missing something because I am tired, but this just doesn't really have enough going on for me. Like, the base concept is somewhat intriguing, but then the article steers off to a completely different direction, which ends in a punchline that has been used a million times already. Maybe if we got more insight into what this "it" is, and the reasons for why the D-Class did what they did were expanded on, then maybe I might change my mind, but for now this is unfortunately a -1 for me.
I enjoy a good non-sequitur as much as the next fella, but in order for it to be really impactful, I want a full committal to the bizarreness. In this case, I feel as though the setup is played a bit too straight for too long, and the next step of reanimation suicide comes on just a note too late for me to really appreciate that this article is committing to an inherently inexplicable phenomenon. In short, it's both a bit too logical and straightforward for a "Stuff is weird and we don't know why" piece, and too bizarre for a more conventionally impactful piece.
As with all of your other work, though, it's capably written, and for that, I have to novote. Just not my cup of tea.
Damn, that water's warm, isn't it?
I enjoyed this quite a lot. This is very early SCP style in terms of general weirdness and uncanny nature of the anomaly, the meaning of which we can only hope to understand. This atmosphere hit me as soon as I saw the image and stayed until the very end. The piece probably could've used a bit more context, but honestly I feel like it's functional as is. +1 here.
Honestly, I’ve got mixed feelings on this piece. One one hand, it really reminds me of old-school creepypasta (in a good way) and I think it does a good job with the length (I never felt like it was too short.)
But honestly, as some others have said it doesn’t really go anywhere. It’s kind of fun to read but it just stops without anything really being found out. If I’m going with my gut, this’ll be a tentative upvote.
But what happens if you pee in it?
I think it would slowly diffuse through the air in the pool, as if it were water.