Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

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Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Zyn 14 May 2020 03:44

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Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Uncle Nicolini 14 May 2020 13:59

scp-5642 deleted for being a blank page.
witnessed by cybersqyd.

Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Jacob Conwell 14 May 2020 20:13

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SCP-5078

[REDACTED] is a Keter class entity hell bent on the destruction of the city of [DATA EXPUNGED]. The entity appears as a 7 meter long lizard with a dog’s skull for a head, bioluminescent skin along its underside, as well as on its doglike ears, and fringes on its back.

Deleted at -30 and three votes.

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SCP-5146 is a friendly Keter class demonoid that appears in the body of an elderly black cat named Pumpkin. The cat has short fur, no front claws, and bright yellow eyes, and is fully capable of human speech. One guard described its voice as “that of a soulful old southern woman.”

Deleted at -26 and three votes.

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SCP-5240 is an average height male with typical 'goth' clothing and make up. the entity was first found in Manchester at an [REDACTED] concert killing multiple people with fire.The entity had to be calmed with the slowing of pace of the shocked singer's singing. The entity can move at light speed when not exposed to sound. It can produce flaming balls of [REDACTED] from its palms. The fireballs in question seem to also move with the speed of the sound. The incident at the concert was masked by the presence of a d-class corpse leading people to believe that he was a suicide bomber.

Deleted at -28 and three votes.

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Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Zyn 15 May 2020 04:47

SCP-5077 is a humanoid creature resembling a Caucasian female but with heavily deformed features including burn scars encompassing its entire face, and exposed bones jutting from its elbows. If SCP-5077 does not have at least 4 humans maintaining eye contact with it, it will attempt to breach containment by shattering the bulletproof glass viewing window, -18 and three staff votes.

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TheFlamingle

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Not a bad premise, but definitely much too barebones to make it as an SCP as it stands. Its an SCP-173 with a narcissistic personality.

The interview didn't reveal much or add to the article in a profound way either. Bring her back to the drawing board and try again!

Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Jacob Conwell 15 May 2020 17:27

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SCP-5056 appears as a normal Google Inc. Google Home Mini that has different measurements than an actual Home Mini. It measures 13cm long and wide, and is 7cm tall. SCP-5056 was located in an alley beside three dead missing persons. SCP-5056’s way of killing is by suffocation with the SCPs own plug-in cord. The SCP is known to only attack when provoked by any type of creature. The device at several points in tests has asked to speak to SCP-079, but the requests are always to be denied. The SCP can also act very similar to SCP-294 if asked for a drinkable liquid only. SCP-5056 is to only be asked for a drinkable liquid during tests.

Deleted at -21 and three votes.

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SCP-211-J

it’s just a long pole with a siren on top that just fucking stomps BUT ITS NOT A SCP SO IT DOESN’T MATTER

Deleted at -50 (its dead, jim) and three staff votes.

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Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Jacob Conwell 15 May 2020 19:11

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Item SCP-5054 is an object with unknown origins capable of shifting its mass, material form, and chemical composition, making it unlikely for the foundation to determinate its primary form. If the skin of any living creature makes physical contact with SCP-5054, it can be healed by anything SCP-5054 judges as a “disease” in the length of time of 1 (one) second to 2,5 (two and a half) seconds. If the subject that is touching SCP-5054 its considered “healthy” by the item, the number of the healing cells starts to grow in very high speed, causing the subject to explode or, in rare cases, developing series of fatal tumors, that kills the subject in 2 (two) to 4 (four) minutes.

Deleted at -17 and three votes.

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Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Zyn 16 May 2020 05:36

SCP-5096 is an entity resembling a 30-year-old human male, with its head replaced by an unbranded 1950s-era tube television set. It wears a blue denim jumpsuit with dark blue gloves, similar to those worn often by TV repairmen. SCP-5096 is capable of rudimentary speech generated through repetition of previously intercepted television and radio signals (see Interview Log-5096-1), -16 and three staff votes.

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barredowl

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There are moments of this which I enjoy: for instance, I do like how the little TV man narrates in various fragments from other television shows, in addition to liking the part about -1-A being locked up and craving attention and the like. However, structurally, I'm very unsure. The structure of this piece feels a little all over the place, and the cohesion between the different parts of this skip isn't really the best-executed. Additionally, the ending feels a little unsatisfying to me. Seems like some conflict was about to break out or something but there wasn't really much, to be honest?

All in all, this is probably a downvote due to me finding a lot of wasted potential here, but I do think there are areas of improvement which could be made here. I think the logs and whatnot could gel a little better together, and I think the conclusion needs to be reworked, because honestly both of those factors really set me off and detrimented this piece for me. In the meantime, best of luck on this article!

manoflamancha25

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There are good elements of this. I like how he tends to speak in television clips. I don't think you need the narrative about how the Foundation wants to terminate him. It's too simple and obvious to work. It feels very much like you're shoehorning in something that doesn't need to be there to fulfill a notion of what you think an SCP should be. Honestly, TV gets lonely when the kids who loved it go off to college is a wonderful idea on its own.

AbsentmindedNihilist

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This idea has promise. The execution and narrative need polishing, but I find this lil dude to be pretty charming. Like manoflamancha25 said up above, the narrative of him getting lonely when the kids leave? That's adorable right there. I encourage you to hold onto this idea + retool it - if you'd like any assistance, please feel free to contact me here on wikidot or on IRC.

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SCP-5190-EX denotes an object previously identified by NASA as TMR-1C, a celestial body of unknown composition located 450 light-years away from Earth in the constellation Taurus. SCP-5190-EX is thought to have been ejected from a nearby binary star system during an early stage in said system's development, and is now travelling away from the system in roughly the direction of Earth at a speed of ~20,000 km/s. SCP-5190-EX was classified as a rogue protoplanet upon discovery, -12 and three staff votes.

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A Random Day

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SCP-2600-EX conveys almost the exact same story, but better. It’s obvious from the jump and the buildup that this stellar object isn’t going to be anomalous, which kills any potential twist ending. The crazy email is just dull, and the reveal that Sorenson is schizophrenic comes across with a wet thud as a result.

Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

TheMightyMcB 16 May 2020 21:25

SCP-5063 was summarily deleted for being blanked by taylor with myself witnessing.

Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Jacob Conwell 16 May 2020 23:34

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SCP-5085 is a intersex humanoid. SCP-5085 has albinism, lavender hair and eyes, is 1.71meters (5.61ft.) tall and weighs 61.24kg.(135.01lbs.). When SCP-5085 dies, she will subconsciously pick a safe amount of time to go back and reverse her death. Anyone who kills or is in a 1.5meter (3.92ft.) radius will gain the ability to remember her dying. SCP-5085 claims to be from another dimension where violence, anger, sadness, and death don’t exist.

Deleted at -25 and three votes.

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Re: Deletions 66: The misty morning over the brine belies a leaden sky

Jacob Conwell 17 May 2020 18:29

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SCP-5668 Appears to be a twelve year old boy approximately 1.7 meters in height. It's anomalous abilities start when any electronic is within 10 meters of SCP-5668. Any electronic in this range with start to short-circuit, and in about 5 to 10 seconds, will brake beyond repair. This once caused a mass breach at Site-██, causing many Keter-class SCPs to breach containment. SCP-5668 is also shown to bare some sort of hatred towards electronics. An interview was held by Dr. ██████ on ██/██/████ to find out why SCP-5668 bares a hatred towards electronics.

Deleted at -12 and three votes.

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