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I loved the exploration log with its unique ideas and realistic dialogue/actions with the captain. The idea in itself is also really well developed with an interesting story behind it. Overall, this is a great skip.
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I liked this, the anomaly and focus on tongues was bizarre and interesting, but unfortunately the log killed it for me.
Control's weird insistence on taking the D-class in alive, even after they killed two agent seemed extremely stupid (I might be missing something here, was control compromised?), as did the fact that everyone who died just kind of ran at the D-class. I liked that D-class and cat kept eating tongues, and only killed people who attacked them, but the whole sequence felt too silly because of how control and the agents behaved.
A thaumaturge with direct expertise in Egyptian thaumaturgy
several thaumaturgic runes
My interest was piqued before I was slammed with a number of phrases such as this. I actively dislike the overuse of such a lazy catch-all word when more colorful, original, informative, or interesting language could be used in its place.
It's especially grating when used for 'rituals', 'runes' and things of the like. Not all magic is the same, and liberal application of such a broad term robs a work from potential creativity and insight.
Perhaps it's a nitpick, but if I'm going to buy into the notion that the Foundation employs mages, I would imagine they'd have no problem articulating some qualitative properties beyond "magic stuff".
I should like something like this, I would like something like this, but I don't. In this case, a lot of minor problems and issues chipped my interest little by little until I was stuck trying to slog through the final portions of the exploration log. The dialogue from the D-Class is incredibly unrealistic and acts more as blunt exposition than anything else, the transition between perspectives is wonky and confused me for the first few lines, and Reinner's constant use of tacticool phrases like, "I'm only asking nicely once", "Understood, going dark", and "Fuck the orders" takes me out of his character. The one thing I say that I like about this is the description of the gore, but that's more to do with my personal obsessions with the subject rather than anything else.
This is a -1 from me. If the exploration log was rewritten to fix all of these problems, I could easily see myself changing my vote to a +1.
I have NO IDEA what is going on, but it was a helluva ride! I loved the dialogue in the log, made it feel more like an actual person. I just wish I understood what the hell is going on!
Still, a +1 from me.
I like this vibes of this piece. I think the body horror might have needed to be upped a tad bit more, as past it there isn't much more meat to the article, but what's here still is entertaining enough.
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