Short, simple, and sweet
It's short, but tells all it needs to tell.
It's a very interesting concept that has emotion to it.
I liked it :) Very enjoyable +1
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(account deleted)You bought me a dress and helped me with the straps. You told me I was pretty and loved, and that the girl who had been inside of me the whole time was finally freed.
Not actually that well aware.
Great concept, solid execution.
Echoing the points about tone and flow, but nothing some minor edits can't smooth out.
+1.
Where are the invisible ninjas cutting onions? Where are they?
Jokes aside, not a lot of things can make me cry. I can't even remember the last time anything on this site has. But goddamn if this didn't make me misty-eyed. I echo Nagiro's sentiment of there being some clunky language here and there but this still gets a definite +1 from me.
Edit: I just noticed that the number is wrong here. In the article you call it 5669, but this is placed in 5699 on the mainlist. You might want to fix that.
God, did this hit so hard for me. I think this really encompasses everything I wish something like SCP-4999 could have done a little bit better, what with showcasing the emotional states and situations people visited by the anomaly were going through. Instead of getting muddled and disjointed with showing very disparate situations, you managed to create a palatable oeuvre of kindness and warmth in this piece. So emotional, so bittersweet, so absolutely lovely. Hard upvote.
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I like it. Short and sweet. It stays around just for as long as it needs to to make its tone and point known. My only note is a grammatical error in the containment procedures. If I'm not mistaken it should be written as 'has been suspended' instead of 'had been suspended', unless containment is no longer suspended for some reason.
This gave me that tingly hairs-standing-on-end feeling in a good way. I like it.
Hit like a damn freight train. +1.
Unrelated note, where is that picture from? It looks like something out of an old art house movie and I'm curious what it was supposed to be in its original context
Meshes of the Afternoon. Classic Surrealist film. Highly recommended.
Apparently it's from Meshes of the Afternoon, an experimental film directed by Maya Deren and Alexander Hammid. According to Wikimedia Commons, this film was "originally published in 1943 without a copyright notice and thus entered the public domain upon publication."
Edit: Sorry! My reply overlapped.
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