Clever premise, but I don't know if I can get behind the execution. There isn't any clear line of reasoning linking the anomaly, the sleep paralysis, to the origin. It feels like a generic "haunting" situation, with no real stakes involved beyond spooking random Foundation employees.
The dialogue also could use a lot of tightening. The first two interviews don't feel like different people, just slightly different information. I don't get a clear separation of voice when I read them, they're both just hesitant and proud. Also, sitting silently for a full minute seems like a stretch in an interview.
I know this is a Bright challenge, but it still feels like there's a lot lacking here. No vote.
