I think my main concern with the article is how much time it spends going over logistics and minutia of La Rue Macabre's agreement with the Foundation and how that agreement was started. Like, I understand that you are attempting to introduce this location, and tell the readers what the location is and why the Foundation just doesn't touch it, but the way that the story is presented feels very expository. There is a conflict but there is no struggle. There's no real overcoming of an obstacle for the arc of the story to feel satisfying.
If you want to write a story about LRM's fight for freedom, I'd want to see the struggle. Right now there are some calm conversations and a kind of bland note at the end to tidy everything up, when I think you'd want to see more pushback from both sides.
Honestly, what I think I would've like to see to this end is what would have happened if the Foundation just kept the stick for longer. I'd like to see the voodoo and swamp monsters become more than they could handle and have to admit defeat. Right now the two parties involved don't struggle enough against each other for us to see any sort of character development, and I lose investment in the story because without struggle, the conflict does not feel convincing.