The Empty Rooms
There we go, just under the wire! SCP-5000, The Empty Rooms! Please enjoy this not-so-locked room mystery.
EDIT: My slot requests are as followed:
5999, 5001, 5423, 5099, and 5500.
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Glad to see this got posted.
All in all, I really like this. As someone who is warry of the "rinse and repeat" style of offsets, the changes between iterations are drastic enough that treading over the old ground is not dull. Additionally, the mystery of what the room's deal is that gets slowly unraveled across the various iterations I found to be quite compelling.
If I did have one complaint, its that we have seen the "We've done this before" story thread a few times on the SCP wiki already (most notably in SCP-2000), though your take here isn't bad by any stretch.
+1 Mann. A good addition to the contest.
This is every bit as incredible as it was when I first read it months ago. There are formatting things that could be improved, but conceptually and narratively this article strikes a chord with me that not many others in the contest have thus far.
Good job, Mann.
I made some minor edits to version 5-K to clarify things a bit, and also fixed the "spacial" instead of "spatial" error throughout.
I had the same question, am I missing something? I don't really understand the point of it, it would be great if someone could explain.
Well, the idea is, with the designation of the page, that things have not gone well. The redirect to the main page was just meant to mean "You're done here, move along." That seems to be confusing people (and not just the two of you; I've had complaints elsewhere), so I've removed the link.
…Actually, I've just changed the link a bit. Try it now and tell me if that seems clear enough.
This is an improvement. The link to the site was confusing but also made me think that they opened a hole into our reality or something and turned it into a meta scp (are there still undertones of this?)
I still think that the ending is the weakest part of this - 'yeah reality disappeared, the end' was underwhelming - but it was the weakest part of a strong article. +1
I think it is better now, but I agree with what ModernMajorGeneral said about it being the weakest part of a strong article. I think part of the issue for me is that when you read the last page, you see the "XK" document link before you see Dr. Matson's notes, so the last concept I was left with was Matson saying that they could still turn it around.
Still a +1, but I feel like the ending is unsatisfying to me compared to an interesting setup and premise.
I have an idea that might make things more satisfying for you. I'll just have to see if I can develop the skill to pull it off.
Okay, check it again. And look… look closer if you have to.
Yeah I was wondering about this. I was enjoying this until that happened, with my initial reaction being 'oh no, the last page hasn't been uploaded' followed by 'oh no, it was another one of those SCPs all along'
Complained Lodged by Dr. Verne:
Should be a complaint, shouldn't it?
> SCP-5000 is a spatial anomaly manifesting in WIng E of Site 98
In SCP-5000-4-E, the I in wing is incorrectly capitalised.
I'd say the most apparent formatting quirk that I'm not a fan of is the plaintext in the research notes. I'd recommend putting them in quoteblocks/similar, so they don't blend with the actual document as much as they are currently.
All in all, I enjoyed this a reasonable amount. The escalation was well-paced, and the actual anomaly was pretty interesting. I feel the ending may have been obvious a little too soon though — I was fairly sure of what exactly was going to happen as soon as it spread to the hallway for the first time and wasn't surprised by anything for that reason. Despite this, the little differences between the offsets and the researcher's notes were compelling enough for me to upvote. And while this form of ending has been done to some extent in the past, it was sufficiently unique in other aspects that that didn't concern me.
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Fixed the formatting issues. I've also added a bit to the final page.
The XK page is meant to just be entirely black I hope, or something is broken for me.
Even if it's not, I honestly feel it's unnecessary, there's enough incipient "oh shit" in the Keter iteration without a gimmick final page. Null vote for now.
I think if you look closely, you'll be able to put your finger on why that page is there. It's really the highlight of the whole article.
To be honest, when I got there I thought it was blank on purpose to signify that the universe got blanked. Would've been a bit cheesy, yea, but I liked the brief moment I thought that's what it was.
Loved the slowly increasing tension as I read. I'll have to look at this one on the desktop as well; I usually read on mobile, so I want to see how the final page looks/is acccessible in another format.
mostly just going to second J. Conwell's comments, however, I do think one of those blue "change highlight" formatting tricks would do some good.
all in all a great article though, easy +1
Also in a serious rarity for mainline articles, Dr. Matson is actually a character I'd like to see a bit more of. I'm interested in his new role at the Mnestics Division.
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