SCP-5001 / Discussion

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My Shot

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 06:05

"Even the technology that promises to unite us, divides us. Each of us is now electronically connected to the globe, and yet we feel utterly alone."
JackalRelated, quoting another author whom I forgot the name of.

This isn't going to win the 5000 contest, but it's worth a shot anyways.

Thank you to everyone who helped me critique this over the week that the final draft was completed! I'm glad that this piece transitioned from conceptualization to actual material so easily for me, as usually I struggle to get stuff from my mind onto the page. Props to everyone who entered the contest, and thank you to everyone who read and enjoyed the piece!

The five followup slots I'd like in the event that I don't win 5kon:

1. SCP-5001
2. SCP-5002
3. SCP-5005
4. SCP-5500
5. SCP-5200

Thanks for reading, everyone!

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5000.png

5000seismogram.png

5000breach.png

Notice background image is two SCP logos stacked on top of one another, but with one rotated.

Last edited on 31 Jan 2020 06:34 by Yossipossi Show more

SimplePig 14 Jan 2020 06:24

Did you create the pictures? They’re fantastic.

Also, I enjoyed how you specified that it’s the media that needs distracting away from anomalous activity more than anything else. I’ve not seen that used often in articles.

I didn’t notice any spelling or tone issues, and this is a really strong entry. +1

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 06:33

The pictures are taken from Wikimedia commons, and have been edited. 5000.png was only cropped, 5000seismogram.png was heavily modified but it's original image remained intact, and 5000breach.png was recolored and had its brightness modified.

I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! To be honest, the fact that the media is ignored in SCPs often kinda undoes the realism for me. I'm glad it was enough for you too! :)

heartheartstar 14 Jan 2020 06:39

oh! i enjoy this. it fits the theme well & fits in with the other X000 scps (bearing the most resemblance, probably, to 2000 and 3000).

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 06:40

Yep, I took inspiration for the general ~vibe~ of this article from there.

aismallard 14 Jan 2020 17:21

This is the first 5k piece I've read that really conveyed a feeling of grandness, and the aesthetic of mystery for me. It told me enough to feel like there's something really big going on, without giving the whole thing away and deflating the suspense.

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 17:40

Thank you, that was my intention!

More Power 14 Jan 2020 17:52

Is OMEGA meant to be connected to the Broken God?

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 18:01

Death of the Author, but that was my intention while writing :)

More Power 30 Jan 2020 21:26

Sorry for the half-month later reply, but thanks for replying.

(Originally wrote something more, but my question was answered in another comment chain)

Last edited on 30 Jan 2020 21:29 by More Power Show more

Mafiew 14 Jan 2020 18:43

At first, I thought the main idea would be too similar to SCP-557 but it turned out to be a unique article. It's definitely one of the top contenders for SCP-5000. Congrats.

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 18:44

Thank you!

JackalRelated 14 Jan 2020 21:16

YOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO WHAT

+1

Yossipossi 14 Jan 2020 21:20

tee hee

Thank for updoot

Fantom732 15 Jan 2020 03:10

I dont know if its intentional but this missing the one tag i knew for sure had to be there may be a stroke of genius considering the theme of the contest.

Yossipossi 15 Jan 2020 03:14

I've excluded three specific tags which should be there, but would limit the interpretations of the piece, so I decided to exclude it.

Fantom732 15 Jan 2020 03:23

+ spoiler questions

COTBG, Sarkic Cults, and Daeva I presume?

Anyway I love this piece enthusiastic +1

Yossipossi 15 Jan 2020 03:26

+ Spoilers +

Not Daevite, just religious in general :p

Glad you enjoyed it!

Meeplet 18 Feb 2021 04:31

Noticed the electric pulse every 7ns, was this intended to have anything to do with 1427?

Yossipossi 29 Apr 2021 23:51

Nice catch! Yes, I intended there to be a minor reference to the material 1427 was created of, though it shouldn't have any major implications on the lore of the article. :)

Koooper 15 Jan 2020 03:51

i know the topic of the next dank cognitohazard audit now also thanks for funny 914 role teehee ;)

aside from the bad joke, i really like this article! has the vibes of an X000 article and it's very eyecatching. this will probably win imo

+1

Yossipossi 15 Jan 2020 04:02

i know the topic of the next dank cognitohazard audit now also thanks for funny 914 role teehee ;)

👀

Koooper 15 Jan 2020 05:44

😳 haha…jk…unless???

ModernMajorGeneral 15 Jan 2020 06:01

Having a big header with a mandatory collapsible at the start annoys me, it feels a bit like waving "look how important this SCP is!" in the reader's face and adds nothing to the story, obviously people are just going to click on it straight away, unlike other collapsibles where you can choose how much text you want to be presented with as you read.

I think this is quite a good article. It was well paced and had a nice amount of technobabble without getting too dense. However, I have mixed feelings about it as a contest entry - I agree with the above comment about this feeling grand and probably being the most "proper" -000 effort, if you think -000s must be a Very Important Thing which link in with other Very Important SCP Lore Things, and the high rating presumably reflects that. The problem is that it peters out a bit at the end. I don't really get a sense of something that interesting being contained in the box other than Something Spooky and World-Ending, of which there are dozens on the site.

I don't think the lackluster thing in the box would matter as much if this was being judged as a normal article. It's a catch-22 - this article is good because it builds up a big impressive -000 feeling, but it does this too well and there isn't a payoff. Novote makes the most sense to express this I guess.

Yossipossi 15 Jan 2020 06:28

Fair enough, glad you enjoyed it though!

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