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Hi.

RuraScarlet 04 Dec 2019 14:37

Sometimes, it's those who reach out their hand who need it most.

Bright tries to comfort a suicidal researcher. He ends up giving them a talk that he very much needed to listen to himself.

A special thanks to pr0m37h3um and TheRiceandCake for giving me critique.

This…came from a bad place. I realized recently that I don't have people I can turn to in my time of need, while being open to comforting everyone else. It got so bad that I made a make-believe therapy session for myself where I was both client and psychiatrist, and fucking cried by myself at my own vents like a loser.

So yeah that's kind of what's happening here. And please stay impartial in rating, I just needed to put my sob story somewhere so I'll feel better in this chilis tonight.

Thanks for reading.

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pr0m37h3um 04 Dec 2019 14:44

Read this in critique. It's good.

RuraScarlet 05 Dec 2019 01:43

uwu

The Pighead 04 Dec 2019 17:51

The context of this Tale is enough to made me upvote. This vision of a more "human" Bright who tries to comfort someone is something I'd never thought and that's why I like it.

RuraScarlet 05 Dec 2019 01:43

Thank you so much!

Site Criticism Team - Staff Review

TheMightyMcB 04 Dec 2019 18:19

I feel bad voting the way I did for this, so let me briefly explain why.

+ Crit

I've upvoted vent pieces before. Honestly, they're some of my favorites. Tales like Crying Over Coffee and i didn't want to see you die like this are probably some of the most powerful pieces I've read on site. This, however, didn't carry the same weight.

I think that's because of your framing. The previous two works were told from the perspective of original characters made by the authors, with those characters going through experiences that were extremely painful and personal to those authors. In addition, those pieces also had fantastic prose and gut-wrenching emotion.

In comparison, this piece is lacking those attributes that make the other pieces so strong. The character isn't one of your own design, so the entire read, I found myself comparing your Jack Bright to the Jack Bright of other tales. They're hardly even the same character to be honest, which distracted me from your message. Furthermore, rather than using the situation that your characters are found in to tell the emotional story, you chose to have Bright monologue at the reader, which gave away your pathos too early in the game. Rather than setting a tone and letting the reader figure out what was happening, you essentially told us "Jack Bright thinks dying sucks and you shouldn't do it if you can help it".

I appreciate the time you took to pour your heart out like this, and I encourage you to find somebody to talk to, but this tale just didn't do it for me. Sorry.

Disclaimer: Opinions expressed in this review do not reflect the opinions of SCP Wiki staff as a whole. Please respond to TheMightyMcB or contact the captain of the Site Criticism Team, SoullessSingularity, for any questions or concerns relating to this review.

Re: Site Criticism Team - Staff Review

RuraScarlet 05 Dec 2019 01:43

Thank you so much for the critique! I will gladly implement this in my future works.

As to my character choice, Bright is very much a comfort character to me, and I wasn't strong enough emotionally to write it from my own perspective so I needed to move the narrative away from myself to make something that's actually passable, thus making this a Bright tale.

I am getting professional help too, if you worry for me, which, don't, I'm okay, really. A talk with a psychiatrist isn't the same as organic interaction, though, and I just recently realized how alone I really was without the latter. I'm glad that I have a few on site people that I talk to sometimes, but it's just…different. than having friends to hang out with. Not that it's bad! No, just different. It was just the lack of people to confide to when I was in a dark place that hit me most and pushed me to make this.

This quickly became a second vent so I'll stop it here. Thank you so much for giving me advice, and, thank you again, for being someone out there who cares.

r0se 05 Dec 2019 16:16

this is really good and i very much like it, although i kind of wish the context of the "comforting a staff member" was more visible in the tale instead of just on this page.

RuraScarlet 05 Dec 2019 17:16

Noted, thank you very much!

ThatMan 12 Dec 2019 21:08

Vent pieces are always my favorites. There is a reason I think 3999 is one of the best works the site has ever seen.

On its own, down to earth Bright is always awesome. He's a unique character and using him as a vehicle for a topic like this is an apt choice.

Easy +1

RuraScarlet 15 Dec 2019 10:05

Aaaaaa thank you very much!!!!!

Percevale 29 Dec 2019 18:23

Oh, I love this a lot. Wholesome, but also with the pop of horror from the poor lady who tripped and accidentally brushed up against the amulet. Not enough Bright stories really deal with the fact that anyone who touches that thing is a goner.

…+1, and saving this for if I need it later.

Kuronohanahana 09 Feb 2020 10:07

I have translated this Tale and submitted it to SCP-JP.
http://ja.scp-wiki.net/in-regards-to-death-bright
I really enjoyed translating it. Thank you for writing a wonderful Tale!!

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Dr bright

Kid with a notebook 07 Mar 2020 11:13

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Jak Mockery 07 Feb 2022 11:48

Damn. +1

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