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Thanks to Gee0765 and DrAkimoto for their feedback! May God have mercy on my soul.
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I feel like this article suffers from not enough content to drive the pop culture reference, and though it features a horrifying discovery log, that doesn't take away from the fact that this is literally just pikachu in real life. There's a story there, and it's pretty gruesome and well written, but in my opinion doesn't make up for the lack of creative anomaly.
This pretty much sums up my thoughts on it too.
Yeah, I can understand where you're both coming from here, but I feel like the fact that in-universe this is just the guy trying to create pikachu in real life - along with him then treating the real-life pikachu as if it were still the cartoon - means that's not really something I can change while keeping the same story here. Sorry you didn't care for this one!
The description is so straight forward that I started to doubt whether the addendum could turn me around on this one, but by golly it did. Hoo boy, it did. +1
I'm with Peppers on this one, but I really wish more focus had been spent on the actual alchemical process. It's so weird and unique and the story told by the addendum is so good, but the actual SCP portion of this leaves a little to be desired.
For these reasons, it is currently unclear whether SCP-4974 is sapient or even possesses a consciousness at all.
This could be shortened to "It is currently unclear if SCP-4974 possesses a consciousness at all."
Overall, I think this article is a good example of the brilliance of a short work executed well and an example of why I like shorter works overall.
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
Overall, I think this article is a good example of the brilliance of a short work executed well and an example of why I like shorter works overall
Agreed. I love the shorter articles that are well-executed: it's so tough to get the pacing right that when you do, it really sells.
I'd love to have another Short Skip contest — think we'll ever do another one?
Yeah, to be honest I don’t think the discovery log is at all sufficient for a reference played this straight. You’ve got the beginning of something interesting here but merely rattling (hehe) off a few ingredients does not a backstory make. -1 in its present form.
Containment and Description sections either need to be longer or shorter, I can't decide, but right now they feel like they're both hovering in a weird awkward length.
Thanks for the gut punch at the last entry, though. A clever twist on "sad lonely old man" suicide with great pacing. Very, very well done.
I actually really love this, of course for the log at the end but also the description of the "Pikachu's" remind me of the stock animations from Hey You, Pikachu! It really calls to mind for me a living creature with a dull, lifeless AI for a brain which I enjoy a lot, and also the tragedy that comes as a consequence of it… +1
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