SCP-4346 / Discussion

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I said something on another website and thought, "Why not make a skip out of that?"

TL333s 06 Sep 2019 20:05

When you say "Hello?" to an empty room and nothing responds, that just means it's trying to trick you into thinking it's not there.

Image was created by Stevie Spiers and is licensed for reuse under Creative Commons.

And before you ask, yes there's an anomaly

They've just misattributed it because I can't get enough of skips that affect Foundation personnel without them realizing.

Thanks to whoever gave me feedback, I forgot to write your names down cuz I'm dumb. D:

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AlephFur 06 Sep 2019 20:16

There is little to no anomalous effects of this SCP. It is basically just a dark basement, and whoever goes inside thinks someone is watching them. Not the best I've seen. Consider changing the entity to being SCP-4346, not the basement. There are also some problems with the story. How does the Foundation know that there is an anomalous entity if it has not ever been detected? Why do people feel these sensations?
Also, the SCP itself isn't very interesting. To make it better, you should definitely think about changing the descriptions. What about a room with infinite doors that gives effects of loneliness and fear and people are inclined to explore the doors, and there is an entity that meanders the halls for victims trapped in it? Change these and it'll be better.

Junior Staff - Site Criticism

Tanhony 06 Sep 2019 20:35

This is a nice little atmospheric piece about loneliness - and I really have to disagree completely with Drelic here, as the ambiguity of whether an entity actually exists or not is really the main centerpiece of the article here. Changing things from that strong central image to a very clear 'infinite space with a spooky entity' story would completely flip my opinion on this around, personally.

Plus, the very specific nature of the sensations of 'suffocation' and 'fear of abandonment' do lend to the interpretation of something anomalous going on here, at least - as well as the fact that everyone who goes into the basement alone comes to this same conclusion.

The interview is fantastic here - we go from wanting some interaction with the entity to a nice realization that this log is probably saying more about the researcher than anything else. That little line of 'the last to follow a set format' is a nice inclusion too - if I'm understanding that right, the implication is that following 'interviews' are much less coherent?

There's a real feeling that this article is just scraping the sides of a much bigger story, but I think that's ultimately to its benefit. It comes in, gives us something to wonder about, and moves on. +1

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Re: Junior Staff - Site Criticism

AlephFur 06 Sep 2019 23:18

My writing taste differs from this, that's probably why

+1

(account deleted) 06 Sep 2019 22:41

Seconding respectable disagreeing with Drelic. This article is really interesting and creepy because it's so ambiguous.

As for what's going on, I'm 100% convinced that there is an anomaly because the researcher's actions are to weird for there not to be one but as for what it actually is… No clue there.