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This is my first SCP. Please let me know if I am overdoing it.
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It seems really very very close to one that was JUST posted, except that one is a sword.
Now all it needs are guards appearing to mock some poor D-Class, then tear apart the room.
It's good. Not exceptional or anything, and is another "mek u go insan" thing, but at least it has a build-up and can be stopped.
One of the better experiment logs I've read on this site. Not the most terribley origional SCP idea, but hey, at least it isn't a sword.
Thanks for the comments. I figured something similar to this had to have been done before, though I hadn't seen the sword example. I wanted to do something fairly simple for my first try though; if I write another I'll try something different.
This is really more of an anomalous item than an SCP. The effect is compelling, but really just seems like the setup for an SCP piece rather than a completed article.
I know that usually that's a bad thing, but in this case, I have to say I really don't have a problem with that. I think this SCP speaks to the Poe in all of us.
'Tis pretty decent, and I think you got the tone very well for a first article. I feel, however, that the three addendums are kind of unnecessary; the first one, while well-written, simply repeats information already given on the main description, but in the form of a history, and you could just mention those two effects described in the other two addendums (animals react to it, and recording devices do not record anything near the item) in the main description.
I'd like for there to be more to the idea. May be just me, but even cliche points (provokes insanity, whatnot) can make a SCP completely awesome when there's more of a rhyme and reason to when they make people go insane. SCP-342 makes people act crazy because they see themselves on a train ride to hell. 882 makes people go insane in order to make itself larger, for whatever purpose it may have. 804's apparent mental compulsion stemmed from the fact that the people who made it actually wanted to put an end to the human race.
This is a rock that makes you see stuff.
Given where we get D-class personnel from, would they necessarily experience the same issues this one did upon exposure? The next subject might be indifferent to the appearance of the blood and bodies, or even entertained by them - which might give the possibility of actually hearing what the voices are whispering…
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