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(account deleted)I think it is good just one itty bitty thing, you need to add a rating module. but besides that it is fine I think
Interesting concept and clean execution. Well done, author. +1
I find the description a bit confusing. They look like tiny ragdolls but suddenly they have wings? They are insects, with vague nonspecific similarities to both a dipteran and a lepiopteran? So three body segments and six legs? What are the mouthparts like?
Edit:. I haven't voted on this because I am still not sure if I am just missing the actual description of these. If it is missing, and it isn't just me, I think that I am going to reluctantly downvote. Send help.
See, that last addendum is what saved this for me. Without it, this is just another living-thing-what-looks-like-objects with a side of body horror. With the last addendum, you have me trying to figure out why there are so many different types, and all but rule out the possibility of a coincidence.
Edit: that last censored word is "Barbie" isn't it.
Why are there so many different types?
They're adapting.
Nice idea, could use a picture. Would it be hard to find a fair use picture of a suspicious looking sofa in a street, and/or a slightly spooky looking doll? That's all you really need here.
Otherwise it's a cool idea and I like the bit at the end where they've been changing with the times. It gives the scp a little more history. I'm not sure if an animal hive (or a barn) from the 1200s would survive untouched until the 1900s though, there's only a few barns that old in the entire world. Maybe knock it up to the 1500s?
I find well-executed body horror to be - at least when it comes to getting a visceral response from me - the most effective form of horror writing. D-2386-181's last comment in particular really sold it for me. +1
commonly ranging between 7cm and 9cm in height
I think you mean mm, not cm. 7cm to 9cm would be largish insects, not small ones.
Only thing that doesn't make much sense is the hostility towards males when they're not "in rut", seeing as that's their sole method of reproduction. You'd think they'd want whatever males encountered them to want to return later, when they could be impregnated. Still, +1 for originality.
The description seems off. You say they are small humanoids. Then you describe their wings. Where did the wings come from? Maybe if you edited it to say "winged humanoids," this could be solved. (Sirpudding above here mentioned this issue, as well.)
Also, how long is the gestation period? How do they actually manage the "impregnation? I mean, if a doll sized thing hit me with a talon like that, I'd jerk back pretty quickly. But you do say it's a cut, not a prick/injection.
All in all, downvote. Interesting concept, but could stand to be fleshed out.
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