SCP-4165 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page SCP-4165.

Author post

(account deleted) 11 Jun 2019 13:58

Should I spoil the concept here? Oh well, I'm sure it's quite obvious as is and everyone will figure it out.

Process of creating this thing was quite simple. It just came to me in the middle of a day and I've decided "Hm, I'm going to write this right freakin' now". And so here we are four days later.

I'd like to thank my awesome critters from the IRC chat, here they are (∩ ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)⊃━☆ﾟ.*
MaliceAforethoughtTheBlueHour TheMightyMcB Proasek ManyMeats Dr_Aloe
Also Weryllium was ready to help me but I kinda posted this before he could so thanks to him too.

(Hopefully no one was left out). And of course, thanks to all of you for reading!

UPD: Changed "pencil" to "pen" in the addendum, IMO it fits the concept a little better. Sorry if I've screwed something in the translations.

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Re: Author post

Genshed 11 Jun 2019 20:25

"quite obvious as it is and everyone will figure it out".

Oh really?

Re: Author post

(account deleted) 12 Jun 2019 14:53

Well, besides the name, I think that the major hints would be:

• The fact that SCP itself is the dude and not the monster.
• The matter that SCP-4165-1 is made of.
• What SCP-4165-1 is trying to do to SCP-4165 during that incident before starting to beat the shit out of him.

Vizlox 11 Jun 2019 15:40

This is great. The log was fantastically weird and unsettling, absurd to the point of comedy.

ManyMeats 11 Jun 2019 16:44

I love absurdism and I think this qualified. Thanks for sharing it with me. Upon first read, I was a little unsure about if this was going to work; neither the ConProcs nor the description really go very far or pull my imagination. But then we get to these beautifully weird logs at the bottom and everything just kind of turns way up in a very short space and this article punches you in the face.

Good job on controlling the pace.

Crashington 11 Jun 2019 20:48

Borat voice very nice

Vizlox 11 Jun 2019 22:53

Oh and uh, one thing.

The only two inscriptions left visible are found on the first and third page

Shouldn't this be "pages"?

(account deleted) 12 Jun 2019 08:57

UPD: Wait I just realized that the original phrase lacks an "s" at the end and that I didn't understand which mistake you were referring to initially. And it took me 2 days. Oh no.

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Ikonovich 12 Jun 2019 06:49

Is it like some sort of physical manifestation of a muse combined with writer's block?

(account deleted) 12 Jun 2019 08:55

+ Spoilers are within

Pretty much. But regarding 4165-1 itself, I was thinking more about a physical manifestation of the unfinished story itself (that's why it's made of ink). Sometimes feeling that you need to finish something, but cannot, can cause a lot of troubles.

SolemnHeretic 13 Jun 2019 15:14

I also guessed that was what it was, and I loved the concept! You get an upvote from me.

5150wned 04 Jul 2019 04:30

SCP-4165-1 is a vaguely humanoid entity that is constantly chasing SCP-4165.

vaguely humanoid is redundant

It will manifest again after a period from 7 to 10 days.

Is it constantly chasing, or only manifesting every 7-10 days?

The airlock is to be equipped with an air-conditioning system and four extraction vents with remote activation.
but does not evaporate from contact with the air.

What exactly is the point of the a/c system?

or pouring the ink into individuals' nasal and oral cavities

A bit horrifying, but why does the containment procedure lack a requirement for personnel to wear protective masks?

You've gotten your concept from somewhere, this can be fine. But I think you need to put in some more work to make this pop out more. Also your prose is awkward at times.

(account deleted) 04 Jul 2019 08:21

vaguely humanoid is redundant

I disagree.

Is it constantly chasing, or only manifesting every 7-10 days?

Good point, I'll remove the word "constantly".

why does the containment procedure lack a requirement for personnel to wear protective masks?

Because the current containment procedures do not require personnel to confront the ink thing at all.

What exactly is the point of the a/c system?

Because the ink thing freezes from the low temperatures of course.

But I think you need to put in some more work to make this pop out more.

Thanks, but I think it's popping out fine.

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GuesssWho 29 Jul 2019 07:02

It's an idea that won't leave you alone! Nice.

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relatable

Forvisk 13 Sep 2020 16:41

I'm in the university for aome time now and have to write my TCC, or whatever the essay for ending the course is named, and its very depressing don't know what to do.