Just tonight I stood before the tavern
Nothing seemed the way it used to be
In the glass I saw a strange reflection
Is this lonely woman really me?
With thanks to:
AKFrost
Uncle Nicolini
The picture belongs to me.
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This has a bit of an LSF-vibe to it in terms of unsettling and weirdness.
This is superb. A beautifully distilled picture of realism and surrealism; not just a great scip, but a great work of fiction all round. Upvote with gusto.
I'm not so sure, yet.
This is certainly well written. Although surreal, the characters are interesting and invested upon, that is good.
But ultimately, I feel lacking, here. The concept of the letters from other worlds was done already, the idea of a skip whose description is surreal by its own nature was done already, even the beach linked to the Church of the Broken God isn't new.
And the piece didn't went to do nothing with those that seemed interesting, most of the references seem actually too forced upon the article, and although nicely done, none of the "letters" actually look like letters, the seem all like excerpts of books with no other purpose than to paint this as a surreal landscape.
No vote for now, but leaning to a downvote, unless someone can point me something I didn't comprehend yet (what is far from impossible).
As a rule I don't try to discuss ways to interpret my skips, as I think they should stand on their own or not at all, but I would just like clarify one small point: none of the documents on display in the article are explicitly letters. Although 2 and 4 might be letters, they could just as easily be diary entries. Letters are just one of the types of document that appears in the bottles in general. This is perhaps a little unclear and I might see about altering the document at some point.
Clarification will be interesting, my point on this was that the documents didn't seemed to be letters. Actually, they didn't seem to be anything more than a generic third person narrative. Not about content, but presentation.
This is the kind of entry where gimmicks to make clear what style of document the reader is looking at should be used.
I like this SCP but I feel like it needs a bit more. Also I think you have to black box the site number.
That's pretty vague, and black boxing site numbers hasn't been popular for years.
I can’t say I don’t like this one. The language used here is pretty superb, and the second note especially paints a fantastic picture.
However, Wrong’s 001 did the alt-history war better in my opinion, while also being more grounded in both history and site lore. In addition, the final note feels similar to your own SCP-3799, as well as some of the material from SCP-1730 and the one Sarkic golem skip. It feels like another iteration of the alt-history formula without much to differentiate it.
Novote
I’m going to have to concur that while this is a solid effort and I enjoyed the minimalist presentation it’s not really bringing anything new to the table. No-vote
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
I was thinking at first that I'd seen things like this many a time before, but the imagery of bottles washing up on a beach made the "letters from another dimension" idea more whimsical. The repeated themes in the documents suggest a bit of story, though it also suggests everything's coming from the same place, which seems antithetical to the setup.
But… I dunno, document 5 is just something I've seen too much of, and it kind of lost me. Also, I think you mention "Oliver" in the one before that, who should be "Olivia" unless something weird is happening. Also "extracts from novels and plays" needs an 'and' before it unless you mean entire plays are included in the messages. No vote.
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