i'm, kinda really conflicted on this skip
the idea is really good and the way it's done is excellent except it feels, overly long? i'm not sure the second collapsible adds much other than a more sinister feel and it'd be the main thing to cut if you were going to? but it might just be that i prefer shorter stuff so *shrugs*
my other thing is that Dr. Wu's question about the first trimester check-up feels like it comes out of nowhere? like my first read through it felt really jarring and brought me right out of the fiction; like, it's necessary foreshadowing but it feels,,,like it comes too out of left-field? perhaps a softer start to the questioning on this like e.g, Dr. Wu asking how they're doing or something and them not mentioning the pregnancy and stuff?
Uncle Nicolini,
Geckoguy2704,
N_Aepic_Fael and
minmin for the initial idea-bouncing and eventual greenlights.
Leveritas,
Crashington,
DrChandra and
RockTeethMothEyes for really nit-picking on tone, dialogue, structure and all sorts of universe-ending plot-holes.
